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Marsha
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25 posted 08-17-2001 12:13 PM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

Janet Marie, I've been absent from here far too long, but when I do get here i find this perfectly divine write from you. Wonderful writing as always you have a great gift. I'm sure he is with you always.

Take care of your memories keep them watered with the hope of love. All of this is so utterly breathtakingly lovely, I adored it all. Truly a great verse.

Take care
love and warm hugs
Mushy

I've definitely been away too long

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning


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26 posted 08-17-2001 03:04 PM       View Profile for snowpants   Email snowpants   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit snowpants's Home Page   View IP for snowpants

'The jade moon just hasn't hung
in my ebony sky quite the same.
I know it misses you as much as I do.
For you loved the night most of all.
Midnight's mist of cool silence fell upon you
like a healing breath of solace and quiet comfort.'

'I could hear your whispers upon the wind.
Reminding me of what I have lost sight of ...
I have been holding my breath for far too long now.
"Butterflies are meant to be free"
As I raised the mug up, the morn's humid breeze
lifted your messenger, returning it to its journey of instinct.
And I know once again ... you have given me destination.'

I know cool is not a proper way to compliment this, J...but the images in my mind with these incomparable verses were as vivid as I've ever had...you've got such a way of describing moments and heart-changing incidents that I felt as if I were watching it all unfold right in front of me...well, needless to say, girlie, this is an absolutely brilliant work of art...and, for the record, your free verse rocks... ...love it, J...

k       

can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

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27 posted 08-18-2001 07:20 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie



Dee...thank you  so much for all your consistant support and encouragement,
your love of poetry is evident in all your wonderful replies  

Holly...well me girlie...what can I say...you have always felt him right along with me and this was made even more cool  that it would be the mug you gave me and the
very cool intend in the message behind your screen name, once again he lets me know where I need to be. Thank you for always sharing and understanding my many butterfly moods. love you girlie  

Kit ... your replies are have a way of lighting up the room...thank you so much for your generous and accepting compliments....and the verse you chose is my fave...
(great minds think alike)   thanks so much Kit-gator  

Melis...trust me sweetie..nothing you said sounded "trite or insincere"..
your words and compliments honor and humble me ...and I KNOW the sincerety of them, the beautiful gifts of poetry you have shared with me prove that!!
thank you very very much sweets  

Marsha ... thank you so much, its good to see you back, thank you for the wonderful compliments  

Kris ... well thank you so much girlie ... I consider that high praise coming from one who does free verse and imagery so very well... and hey "cool" is a groovy reply    and yeah..even tho my first love and instinct is to rhyme, writing unrestrained like this was a great release. Thank you frostbootie    


thank you all for these amazing replies.



Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

Mark Bohannan
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28 posted 08-21-2001 07:42 PM       View Profile for Mark Bohannan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark Bohannan

Wanted to add this to my library so SWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOP... here it goes.  

No comments from the "MOTH" please.  I know the color of my hair.
Duncan
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29 posted 08-22-2001 02:57 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

Mornings have always been the hardest,
waking without the anticipation of you.

In all honesty, a poem of this length usually tries my attention span but I was hooked by the first two lines... and never once dissapointed.  This took my breath.
Janet Marie
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30 posted 08-22-2001 11:05 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Mark...thank you for adding this to your library, Im sure Im in good company...and what moth comments?
for that matter what hair?  

Duncan....thank you very much...that is one of the best compliments one poet can give another.
I know this is long...somethings simply cant be expressed with succinctity and done justice...
thanks for taking the time to read this, I appreciate it much  
jm

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 08-22-2001).]

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31 posted 08-18-2005 02:01 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I felt like "feeling" something I read tonight, and knew just where I had to come.  Thank you Mothy One, you are truly just amazing!
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32 posted 08-18-2005 09:01 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Sharon... thank you so much for bringing this one back up...I needed to read it again myself as a reminder of things I should always hold close and strive for.
I miss writing like this...but have come to understand the reasons for letting go...still the level of inspiration was always so amazing to feel when the butterfly muse spoke to me..and then there is always the magic of timing...you bumped this poem today...and earlier my back yard was full of Monarchs, seems theyve begun their migration earlier than usual.
*smile*  

I tried to find that pic again, that was posted originally... I'll have to see if I can get it back on the thread...
and maybe spend some time editing the poem too... it needs some serious work on the line breaks.. its never easy reading our older work is it? lol
Lord my muse is always so long winded...lol

thank you for finding this one again.


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33 posted 08-18-2005 10:12 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

check your email.  I can't wait to see what you do with this - can it even get any better?
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34 posted 08-18-2005 11:31 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

oh my, JM
I am nearly speechless from the sheer beauty of this


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35 posted 08-19-2005 01:22 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

~Butterfly Promises~


Mornings have always been the hardest,
waking without the anticipation of you.
With you, each orange glow sunrise
was equal to a seasons change.

Waking to your emerald presence
was like rising to perpetual spring.
Each new rose washed dawn of you
was my soul's renewal.

The nights haven't been any easier,
the jade moon just hasn't hung in
my ebony sky quite the same.

I know it misses you as much as I do ...

(You loved the night most of all)

Midnights mist of silence fell upon you with a healing breath of
solace, the silver promise of the stars caressed your scars ...
and in the unfolding of darkness, you finally knew peace.

God how I miss the way you filled my nights with lyric and rhyme.

You made the music resonate off the stars ... playing my
heartstrings with the same slender, stroking, fingers that
enchanted your beloved piano keys.

And oh how I miss your smoky voice ...
the way you persuaded me with poetry,
captivating me with cadenced content.

That's what I miss the most of all ...
the contentment that came from your company.
The completion I found as a woman in just listening
to you breathe as you slept.

The seasons have come and gone now for almost
two full cycles since you took merciful flight.


Summer's magenta heat must eventually surrender
to fall's crisp anticipation and glorious color ...
Indian summer's golden grace will be ushered in soon
on a yellow harvest moon, Autumns arrival is assured.

Only nature is this constant, keeping all her promises ...

Autumn sends her invitation of change, delivered on
velvet winged messengers, speaking of things to come.
I have quietly watched them for several weeks now ...

The Monarchs have begun their whispered migration,
their sudden, abundant, orange presence is nature's
guarantee of the next season's gifts.

As I sit here on my porch of morning, watching the
marigold sun crest the horizon,  I ache in confess
that I have not kept my butterfly promises.

I also know it is not a coincidence that my soul searching should
coincide with the Monarch's journey towards unending warmth.

Like so many times before, when I am the most lost ...
you send me a sign, offering me a path to follow.


I no longer question this magic, nor look for the logic.
For love needs no reason, no logical explanations,
no need to ask the how or whys of your little miracles.

Like how my flower beds are lifting with winged fluttering.
As I sat here among the Zinnia's color burst rainbow,
I was almost expecting this ... expecting you.

So when that one Monarch floated towards me,
then touched down on the rim of my mug ...
I smiled and then held my breath,
trying to hold on to this moment of you.


As it rested, opening and closing its fragile
wings in perfect orchestrated slow motion,
I could hear your whispers upon the winds ...
reminding me of all that I have lost sight of.

I have been holding my breath for far too long now.

"Butterflies are meant to be free"

As I raised the mug up, the morn's humid breeze lifted
your messenger, returning to its journey of instinct.

And I know once again ... you have given me destination.



~~~~~~~~~

*sigh* ...
Even back then, I wasnt happy with the line breaks of this..Still, I didnt want to totally rewrite it, as the words always came from another time and place and I dont think I should touch that...(I did take out a few lines and now glaring cliches} but I wanted to restructure it in a more poetic presentation than those previous blocky big verses....yet all I did was make it longer.

ah well.... succinctity will never be my strong suite.    

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Sharon... thank you again.
Kacy ... thank you dear one
to both of you.

thank you Vante... always.
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36 posted 08-19-2005 03:13 AM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

Janet Marie, I am so pleased that this has come up again. It so deserves to be read by all and to be reread by those who have in the past.
You have a special touch and the loved you shared was special. Somehow I have not been able to express those feelings and it does me good to read yours. Thank you,  martyjo
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37 posted 08-19-2005 11:44 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Exactly!  That is the reason!  For those unable to show that love, you do it for us!  I could never put my finger on what it was before until it was in print!

The re-work is better you're right, but then what do I know of line breaks

I think tonight I shall dust off some more goodies. These are gems needing a light.
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38 posted 06-17-2006 03:48 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I woke this morning with a Willow ache, and knew just where to come to wallow in it - yup I did, and now I am a mess but a good kind of mess, yanno?

Sometimes the promises we keep seem broken but in fact they are only mending.
 
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