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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2001-08-16 05:32 AM


You were right.
I added plight.
Empty zeroes
in your life.
I force a break
behind the One
No long now
the only son...
a comma cursed
to break your stride
and as you paused,
the zeroes lined...


First, a son
to give you pride
and mirror'd cry of all One's lies.
Now sun rises--
sets with him.
He stood with you
to make One ten.


Then our daughter
came and bred
the simple ten
to one hundred.
In her eyes
sun set to blue
in gloried proof
of grace in you.


They taught you how to open eyes,
not but to see but show inside
all of vulnerability
that comes with gift
of angelsing---
Eternity, a rolling rail
as the serpent swallows tail--
the wheel in its pristine premise--
to swallow tail and follow bliss...


And here I stand, the last in this:
the abstract space so often missed.
Always I have watched your back,
and eaten dust raised from your tracks.


I am here to keep your place
whenever there should war be waged.
You will not be one, alone--
For by my stand? An army comes.
Where once a soldier stood unarmed,
a thousandth force keeps you from harm.

[This message has been edited by serenity (edited 08-16-2001).]

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Decaflame
Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-08-16 09:26 AM



Serenity, the multiplicated sense of this piece is astounding, for you indeed speak not for one, but for the thousands brought about...

this is a very intriguing write, and I am glad I found it!

Cpat Hair
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Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-08-16 09:33 AM


place holder perhaps..but not value..for zero as you have shown..added after another does increase the value...

An enjoyable read.and interesting thought process...


Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2001-08-16 09:49 AM


Serenity,
Without this poem the one between the lines would not exist. Enjoyed both. *L* Sy

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-08-16 01:30 PM


First, a son
to give you pride
and mirror'd cry of all One's lies.
Now sun rises--
sets with him.
He stood with you
to make One ten.
Then our daughter
came and bred
the simple ten
to one hundred.
In her eyes
sun set to blue
in gloried proof
of grace in you.
They taught you how to open eyes,
not but to see but show inside
all of vulnerability
that comes with gift
of angelsing---
Eternity, a rolling rail
as the serpent swallows tail--
the wheel in its pristine premise--
to swallow tail and follow bliss...
And here I stand, the last in this:
the abstract space so often missed.
Always I have watched your back,
and eaten dust raised from your tracks.
=========================
the way your mind works poetically never ceases to amaze me...
there are so many layers and depths to this..
outstanding sen...again.

Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom
Precious rhythm you are my guide
These days are sacred, my heart is humble
Oh warrior show me thy light

brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
5 posted 2001-08-16 02:05 PM


my dear Serene, your poetic talents continue to grow and grow, but what really blow me back was the emotions, I sensed alot of sadness in these lines. Be well my friend, take care of that heart of yours. HUGS, ok.
Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2001-08-16 07:24 PM


Such a powerful and emotive piece you have shared today and of course it goes without saying that it is done in the poetic splendor that you hold at the tip of your fingertips.  Superbly written as always.
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