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The Mermaid Returns |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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She'd been away so long it seemed eons of sadness filled her life she missed her friends beneath the sea the world above so filled with strife. She sat upon the rocks in gaze with hopes her father would appear then slowly, as if in a haze Neptune appeared, called "Do not Fear" If it be time to come back home step off the rocks and come with me no longer live in constant roam come now, and live your life of free. She took his hand and held on tight and went back to her place of right. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 08-15-2001).] |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
We all definitely need to know when we are a fish out of water... well done Cat! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes when out of our depths or element..it is a comfort to be given the hand to find our way back... nicely done. I enjoyed for its story telling quality as well as what the reader might take from it as a metaphor for their own life |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
A lovely piece...... And I agree with all that has been said..... It could be a simple fairy tale.....yet telling more than that... You have done wonderfully Sandra....  Thank you *************************** "Oh...me!Oh Life! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed there is more here. . . but that's another story. . . wonderful Sandra. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Beautifully expressed thoughts...in that magical way you are so good at Much enjoyed. ~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
and she disappears into the depths, green, cooling, and safe......life is better 'neath the surface....Loved this one, sis!!  The road goes on forever, and the stories never end... |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, we all look for that peaceful place of serenity and calmness of the soul..such a very good write, Sandra...very gentle smile |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Once in awhile we run across a poem that really lends itself to a peaceful transition and this lovely piece does just that. An exceptional write using the expansion of metaphors across our lips as we read and done so with your ever-growing talent. I loved it much and the depth of thought within it as well. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CatalinaMoon~ Very nicely done~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
A lovely rhyming piece, showing the longing which waits in the heart till time, the opening of a door to freedom and then the hand of welcome. The soul then free. Great work. Rick |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well, Moon..you do know I love how you express yourself..and love your picture... hugsssssss ~Wynter/Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sandra, Wonderful story, and the images just make it so real... Love, Elise |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Very nicely penned. I, too, can read so much more into this piece. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I wish we all had such a wonderous place to return to when we lose our (footing). Very imaginative and lovely. Big smile Sincerely, Regina |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is delightfully portrayed Sandra ... a wonderful fantasy of the sea, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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