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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-08-15 03:52 PM

Gravel crunch
grating stone slip
sounds as feet
tread on ways
up or down

empty ears filled
not with voices ground
but other words
from other times
and other planes

wandering alone
on river's side
I find in me
histories

Sharp flint scraper
ancient skeleton
sea life left long ago

I am not the current
but I am part of
the stream

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-08-15 03:56 PM

This current runs swift and cool....the imagery is wonderful, but this:

Sharp flint scraper
ancient skeleton
sea life left long ago

this comprises the best lines....

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2001-08-15 04:09 PM

Ah, I like the last lines best. This was great.
Sandra

poetsguild
Member

since 2001-08-12

Posts 85
Florida

3 posted 2001-08-15 06:20 PM

I am not the current
but I am part of
the stream

and that is the journey
some very good lines in this
like how it goes from the concrete
and goes universal

nice work, Cpat Hair

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-08-15 06:59 PM

I like this one. . . to be part of life. . .and not just in it. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

5 posted 2001-08-15 09:01 PM

Great imagery...I like these last lines best:

I am not the current
but I am part of
the stream

~Krista

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-08-15 09:35 PM

it seems to be true, the stones do talk, don't they, you seem to be listening

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

7 posted 2001-08-16 02:00 AM

Ahh, now, I liked this very much, Cpat, especially the last..gentle smile

wpwpoet
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 99

8 posted 2001-08-16 06:36 AM

I am that I am...

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

9 posted 2001-08-16 06:39 AM

I suppose we are all merely along for the ride now that you make me think about it....and you did.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2001-08-16 08:54 AM

Thanks to all of you for taking time to read and comment.... it is always apleasurre to see what others take from the things we write...and or to know what lines they enjoyed most..

Thanks Again...

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