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Between the lines |
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shadow of the fall Member
since 2001-08-13
Posts 83Indiana 
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I read between the syllables where dust and seeds once laid perception grew in multiples and trust began to fade. The walls were closing in on me the sun was going down and though I didn’t want to see I saw and read the sound. The sound of words and masterfully were played and played so well it took me over heaven’s sea to plunge me into hell. I’ll never tell a living soul the reason for my pain… but yes, my life has paid the toll… I’ll never trust again. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shadow, this is beautifully sad...but a wonderful first entrance into Passions! Welcome! Please check your e-mail for a special message! Karilea |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
This was such a heartfelt piece of writing that was was extremely well written. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Words lift us off our feet and dash us to defeat. Good write. "Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve" |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Great imagery in this...a very heart-felt write. And a hearty welcome to Passions to you!  I look forward to reading more.~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is an impressive emotive piece and your cadence is very well done Welcome to Poetry Land I look forward to more of your work... and may I add... its very cool to see a first post with so many replies next to it.... nice to see a new member participating and enjoying the poetry of others as much as posting thier own work. take care jm Feels like Im dancin with truth and wisdom |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Beautiful, emotional peice, Shadow, very touching. Welcome to Passions. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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shadow of the fall Member
since 2001-08-13
Posts 83Indiana |
Sunshine, thank you for the greeting and the nice reply Sue tang: thanks for reading this first post. RSWells: yes, words are so powerful. thank you Smitten Kitten: thank you so much Janet Marie: I enjoy replying and reading very much. thanks Dee: thanks and it's nice to be a shadow in the open forum! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Hey, you look great, glad I could introduce you to the site...you're on your own kiddo, God love ya! " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
welcome to PIP... this is nicely crafted and the sadness..the pain palpable... I enjoyed the read..and look forward to seeing more of yor work |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
do I know too well what you feel... |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Churning from deep within, a soulful endeavor for sure. Greatly enjoyed. Willie |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Welcome to Passions! This was beautiful...Trust is hard to come by when it has been taken away...take careCindi |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
The first time we give trust, it's fairly easy - but as it's abused, we realize how fragile it is and how hard it is to offer again. And eventually, trust can be destroyed - Then we're left with a hole in our heart. You've written that desolation very well in this sad poem. |
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shadow of the fall Member
since 2001-08-13
Posts 83Indiana |
Kay, thanks! Cpat Hair: and you too, thanks and I like this place a lot. Passing shadows: you too? Sorry  thanks for reading this poem.Willie: deep within is a hard place to reach. thanks for reading. Cindi: sure was taken away, sometimes it's easier to block it out. thanks for reading. Illusion: and sometimes it is an illusion...trust I mean. thanks for responding. Karen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
trust does come back. . . but not soon enough for most. . . well done, and welcome!!! ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
So much pain to be endured..... I liked it....... Welcome to Passions..... Thank you ************************ "Oh...me!Oh Life! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Welcome to Passions..enjoyed very much.. ~Victoria~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
shadow: There is much between the lines, it is my favorite part of poetry. Welcome to Passions! |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Great post...well written and well recieved... welcome, I'll be looking forward to reading more. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions enjoyed |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Welcome Shadow of the fall, you wrote a beautiful first post. I think you'll enjoy your stay here. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
How sad to have lost trust but you have written about it so beautifully here. Welcome to Passions; I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. - Jeff |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Late as usual that's me - excellent poem and I am sure so many relate to this piece - I know I sure do! Welcome! If you have but one true friend when you die you were truly blessed |
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shadow of the fall Member
since 2001-08-13
Posts 83Indiana |
Sven, thank you for reading/ My enchanted melody: thank you also! Victoria, nice of you to reply to me. Martie, me too, thanks Chris, nice of you to say that. thanks Vandana, I do feel welcomed Titia: me too, thanks rascal, yes it's hard when you can't trust, thanks for replying Mysteria, better late than never! I am glad you read and replied, thanks. Karen |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Shadow of the Fall! This is such a powerful and flowing piece, you've crafted this beautifully .... I hope to read more! Best wishes, /Kit |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
The best part of poetry is 'between the lines'. Yours succeeded in touching the souls of others... the ultimate triumphant goal. They saw that which made the impression... from 'between the lines'. Welcome to Passions in Poetry. Looking forward to seeing more of your work. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Shadow, Wonderful work here, beautifully sad, enjoyed very much and welcome to Passions hope you enjoy your stay. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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shadow of the fall Member
since 2001-08-13
Posts 83Indiana |
going through a divorce, helps to learn to write, seems others have pain and mistrust also....what a world we live in.... Karen |
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