navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #15 » Take a walk in my mind
Open Poetry #15
Post A Reply Post New Topic Take a walk in my mind Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio

0 posted 2001-08-13 06:30 PM


hey yall
well i am back.  (i say that alot dont i?)  anyways i havent written in a while.  i started this alittle while ago and been doing alot of thinkng trying to get my life in order.  and this poem just flowed out.  tell me what you think.  

Take a walk in my mind

Take my hand
and you will see
where my dreamz
become reality
come take a walk
into my mind
and all my secrets
you will find
but first there is something
i must warn you about
theres things in my mind
that will make you scream and shout
so is this still the place
that you wanna see
then come on my friend
come follow me
walk down the hallway
to door number one
you see a father, a mother
and there new born son
things look so happy
or so they seem
just 2 in love poeple
and the american dream
later down the road
things started to change
everyones life started
to rearange
for daddy left home
with my moms best friend
and the once strong love
came to an end
then they fought in court
over little old me
but i was only 6 years old
and to young to see
my mom won the battle
but my dad won the war
cuz he took the house
and kicked us out the door
skiping ahead
to a year down the line
living on the streets
working for a dime
so i joined a gang
thinking it right
it got me off the streets
and a place to stay for the night
but by the age of 9
i was running guns
i didnt think nothing of it
i thought it was fun
but i was digging myself
deep into a hole
little did i know
my childhood it stole
fast forward agian
i was seventeen
i was dressed to the nines
racking in the green
went to a party
just me and my friend
walking down the road
thats where this tale begins
car turns the corner
and the tires squeel
we turned to look
our fate was sealed
3 quick shots
and they drove away
my friends on the ground
his life fading away
he said one last thing
when he looked in my eyes
get out of this now
then he started to cry
i held him close
as he passed away
and i got out that life
the very next day
a few days later
i bought my guitar
and  buy the end of that year
i was playing in bars
but it kept me off the streets
and i am thankful for that
and i know D's watching over me
saying play that guitar phat
ahead in time once agian
to 2000 and 1
a lonely rebel outlaw
trying to have some fun
looking for love
no more one night stands
looking for someone
to take my hand
and come with me
on this wild ride
threw the good and the bad
to be by my side
are you up to the challenge?
now that you seen the real me?
or will you just run away
scared of what you see
if you stay you wont regret it
for my love knows no ends
just take this heart into your hands
and these angel wings i will mend
i will end this poem now
before i start to cry
off to another lonely night
and only god knows why...

Jesse C. Jaymz  

When I was a young man I vowed never to marry until I found the ideal woman. Well, I found her - but, alas, she was waiting for the perfect man. :(

© Copyright 2001 Jesse Jaymz - All Rights Reserved
Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
1 posted 2001-08-13 06:42 PM


Jesse, I have seen the heart, the soul, the person with whom you speak and I can tell you that there is no running away. You have become part of our family and as long as you need, and whenever you desire our door is open wide. I hope that by writing this it helped heal a few of the wounds that never got enough loving medicine to heal on their own. We all love you Jesse, and we'll all be here whenever you need.
                        Ria & Kevin

inot2B
Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205
Arkansas
2 posted 2001-08-13 07:18 PM


Jesse what I see in your writing is a little boy who grew up to be a wonderful man. With all that you went through and still you pulled yourself out of the gutter. For mothers like me you give us hope that maybe our sons who are in the gutter may wake up like you did. Thank you for showing this mom there is hope for my son.
athena4
Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622

3 posted 2001-08-13 09:22 PM


Oh Jesse,
     This is so deep and full of angst. I hope that the "outlaw" has become the "angel", and you will find your happiness of so many days you have missed.  A true work of art in your writing...best of luck to you...
         Elise

Moon Dust
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK
4 posted 2001-08-13 09:32 PM


Wow that was some story, seemed sad though, hope everything works out for u.

You don't have a choice to die but you do have a choice how you meet it.


rosepetals25
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Elite
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076
PA
5 posted 2001-08-13 09:34 PM


Jesse,

   I'm glad you chose to come back, you are a wonderful writer.  Very well done.. one of my favorites actually.

Welcome back.

TaraB

DawnG
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494
United States
6 posted 2001-08-13 11:48 PM


Jesse,

This is a wonderful poem. You have come through a lot in your life and are the stronger for it.

                   Dawn

Elizabeth
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871
Minnesota
7 posted 2001-08-14 12:33 PM


Hi Jesse!

I loved this poem....glad to hear that your life is straightening out, and I hope that the future will hold nothing but the best for you! *hugs*

P.S. I haven't been talking on ICQ lately, so don't think I've been ignoring you! I managed to cut my computer time drastically this summer.  

Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
8 posted 2001-08-14 12:49 PM


Kevin and Ria:  my midwest family.  thank you for your kind words.  and i know yall will never run.  and i thank you alot for that.  and for everything yall have done for me.  it means alot to have a friends like yall.  

inot2B:  your words in your reply really brought tears to my eyes.  knowing that i gave you hope really touched me.  thank you so much.  please e-mail me.  *hugs*  

athena4:  Elise, thank you for calling my poem a work of art.  and thanks to my name being jesse jaymz i will always be alittle outlaw but there is an angel inside of me.     thank you

Moon Dust:  thank you for stoping in and looking at my poem.  i hope it all works out too.

Tara:  *hugs*  thank you for the welcome back.  and for making me blush from what you said about my writing.     you know how i always took compliments.  thanks for stoping in and reading.  *hugs*

Dawn:  yes i am stronger for it.  and very glad of it  

elizabeth:  *hugs*  no problom hun.  messege me some time.  thanks for reading  

love you all
Jesse  

When I was a young man I vowed never to marry until I found the ideal woman. Well, I found her - but, alas, she was waiting for the perfect man. :(

Tamma
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV
9 posted 2001-08-14 01:02 AM


(*hugz* Jesse I never knew! I hope you know that I'll always love you, no matter what. And I wanna thank you for all the advice you've given this "Lil Kid". Hun, You always know how to get ahold of me...never hesitate.


Love ya hun,
Tamma

"A friend's shoulder makes a
nice pillow when you're crying" ~Me
"If beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I guess love is too" ~Me

Snooganzmeister32
Member
since 2001-07-17
Posts 67
Cali, USA
10 posted 2001-08-14 01:23 AM


*is in tears* Oh, my goodness. You have such a smooth way of turning what one might think to be some type of a love poem into your life story. So sad...
Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
11 posted 2001-08-14 02:09 AM


Jesse, my friend~
Sometimes life serves us up some mighty hard lessons to swallow ...
It would appear to me that you have swallowed hard and have come out with a remarkably big heart~

A loving, open and caring piece you've written ...
Touching others is something you do very well~
*Hugs* hon~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
12 posted 2001-08-14 02:14 AM



Jesse-
   Ah yes...the little angel returns...and
   with such a touching and heartfelt write.
   You have been through more than your share,
   my friend, and you've come out of it
   wonderfully.
   You've grown into a caring and sensitive
   young man, and I am happy to be able to
   call you my friend.

   Hugs to you,
   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2001-08-14 07:04 AM


Original style...I think someone is out there for you Jesse...either you will find her or she will find you...until then try to enjoy your life...sounds like you have some good things going for you...James
Kitty**
Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428
Charlottesville,VA USA
14 posted 2001-08-14 07:49 AM


So beautiful, so sad, but with so much
promise for better days.
NICE GOING HERE !!!
Hope all goes your way...

Kitty

catalinamoon
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
15 posted 2001-08-14 08:13 AM


Inspirational write, my friend, because you can make it, and so can we all. You're a strong guy, and you've got what it takes.
Life often tries to beat us down, but hell, we can't let it, can we.
Luv ya
S

dgvarner
Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
16 posted 2001-08-14 02:45 PM


"i believe we are here for a reason.  As each day unfolds, we see less of the shadow and more of the sun."  

i dont know who wrote that, but i found it recently..   

great write angel..and yes, you HAVE seen more than your share of the hard side of life..but i believe youve learned a lot from it..having fought your way out, you have, perhaps, MORE appreciation for the goodness in life..    i think youve turned out just fine! youre a good man jesse..one day love will come knocking at your door..dont look too hard for her, as you may miss her standing right in front of you!  

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

in front of total strangers will ya kiss me..
flowers for no reason but you miss me..
oh..i wanna be in love.. -etheridge

Blaec
Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 130
The Sunshine State
17 posted 2001-08-14 02:52 PM


Jesse, your writing here is wonderful.  Your words break my heart.  The road that you have traveled has been harder than most, but you've managed to pull through it.  I know that you don't see it yourself but you are a strong beautiful man.  Love will come your way.  I love your poem and I love you!

Kris

Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
18 posted 2001-08-14 03:22 PM


Tamma:  *huggles*  my sweet little sister    thank you so much for your support.  it really means alot to me.  and the same goes for you anytime you need me you know how to get a hold of me.  *hugs*  love ya too sis.

Snooganzmeister32:  *hugs*  dont cry.  lord knows i have done enough of that in my life.  and thank you for replying    my words are smooth??  now that is one i was never told before.  thank you    just write from my heart is all i can do  

Marge:  my friend, thank you so much for replying.  and yes lifes been hard and still is but i am hoping and praying every day that i will come out on top.  and yes i am seeing that i do know how to touch others.  and that is very odd to me.  never knew that just the little words that came from my heart could touch people so much.  and i thank the lord for that talent    *hugs* thanks hun.

vicky:  *hugs*  where have you been hun??  i missed seeing ya online     thank you for saying you are happy to call me your friend.     that means alot to me.  e-mail me sometime.  i miss ya  

James:  yes this is an original style.  what really made me feel kinda odd after i wrote it i was reading it back to myself and it almost sounded like i wrote a rap song. hehe.  thanks for stoping in.  

Kitty:  first off a big virginia *hugs*  out to you    and thank you for the reply.  i know i have said thank you like 50 million times in this reply but i mean every one of them.  and yes heres to better days ahead.

sandra:  *huggles*  yes i have made it    and your right life always tries to kick us when we are down.  but with inner strenth alot good friends like you we always make it through     thank you for all your loving support.

gale:  *looks in front of him, behind him, next to him*  damn.  she aint there.     oh well guess i will look another day     thank you hun for all your support to.  good to know that i have another   on my side.  thank you so much.  *runs to the door after hearing a knocking*  damn it was the ups guy and not love.  *pouts* hehehe thank you hun  *huggles*

Kris:  first off   too    and i am sorry that my words broke your heart.  trust me i have had my own words break my heart at times.     i know it sucks.  *sigh*  thank you for replying and for being such a good friend to me.  and you wait till you get up here to ny.  we will have a hell of a party.     love ya

When I was a young man I vowed never to marry until I found the ideal woman. Well, I found her - but, alas, she was waiting for the perfect man. :(

Victoria
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Ascendant
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869

19 posted 2001-08-14 04:06 PM


Enjoyed your words jesse..you certainly can draw us in with your poetry..keep writing..

              ~Victoria~

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
20 posted 2001-08-14 05:18 PM


Hey Jesse, If I reckon correctly your love is headed for the corn fields mumbling about something loopy...LOL I wonder if you might know anything about this? Maybe it's just a psyche kind of thing though...LOL
Suetang
Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia
21 posted 2001-08-15 07:56 PM


Jesse
Your words sent a shiver down my spine, so very powerful were the images you portrayed. Thank you for opening up your soul to us and may your life find the love and happiness you so surely deserve.  Take care.....Sue

Suetang

maeve
Member
since 2001-08-01
Posts 139
In the Outback
22 posted 2001-08-15 08:35 PM


Jesse, this is the first of your work I have read and it touched my heart. It seems to me, that you are willing to show so much of your heart to the right one, is a good start. Best of luck to you.

Maeve

Take me home to Erin's shores,
to where my heart roams free.

Double Cross
New Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 4
Rochester, ny
23 posted 2001-08-20 03:26 PM


Jesse
my band mate and friend great work here.  i really enjoyed this.  you have talent.  never forget that.  i heard all your songs and so has the rest of the band and you got that talant to touch people in your soul.  you will get to nashville my friend.  trust me you will    just keep writing man.  
see you at band practice
teddy

Carolina
Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 224
Myrtle Beach, SC
24 posted 2001-08-20 04:00 PM


Jesse, thank you for reading my poem, and for making me feel at home by using my FAVORITE word in the whole wide world.. "Y'all"!  I'll be reading more of your poems!  
Trillium
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098
Idaho, USA
25 posted 2001-08-20 06:47 PM


Jesse:  You are so brave to expose the workings of your life and the harships you have been through.  I guess you must have known it would find a most sympathetic ear! I'm sure you must feel pride for making the changes you have and I hope your life takes a turn towards happiness!

Betty Lou Hebert

StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
26 posted 2001-08-28 04:18 PM


Jesse (((((((hugz))))))))) this is a great poem ... I dont even know where to begin to say how much I like it ... It's just so YOU !
Charisma
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Ascendant
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906
lost in blue pages
27 posted 2001-08-28 05:09 PM


Thank you that you allowed me to take a walk in your mind....and I felt the pain and sorrow within, but also hope and love.
You made a good choice, and take the change to step out before it is too late.

(((Warm hugs)))
Charisma

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182
Netherlands
28 posted 2001-08-28 06:46 PM


All the words have been said so I just will give you a big HUG  

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #15 » Take a walk in my mind

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary