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Open Poetry #15

Remnants

Rindercella
Member

since 1999-11-12

Posts 64
La La Land

0 posted 2001-08-13 05:37 PM

I could not tell
from the remnants
where the heart
or the heartache
began

So, seamstress
that I am not
I won't know where
to begin
the mend

*If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours*

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-08-13 05:40 PM

nicely done... short concise and still the image full...

A pleasure...

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

2 posted 2001-08-13 05:40 PM

Look for the scars... memories... and start from there mending forward. Hold the past in loving memory, to visit with recollections, but not to live there and dwell. Start at the scars and mend forward. :-)

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2001-08-13 05:50 PM

I liked the way you wrote this!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2001-08-14 07:11 PM

Rindercella-
   Oh..I like this lots!
   Wonderfully expressed.

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

howpeculiar
Member

since 2000-12-12

Posts 56

5 posted 2001-08-14 09:04 PM

Oh, I like this so much! I wish I had more to say: perhaps that it gave me a smile and an ache? Lovely, just lovely.

Rindercella
Member

since 1999-11-12

Posts 64
La La Land

6 posted 2001-08-15 06:19 AM

Thank all of you for reading and leaving a reply.

*If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours*

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