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Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-08-12 04:49 PM

What we Share

you wear it so well
sentimentality’s shawl
on you it looks good

gratification
on the strings of violins
smiles come willingly

by the purest voice
the pull on our hearts so strong
tears well in our eyes

timing of feelings
when unbidden come sweetest
deeply felt this joy

angelic nature
decreed by siren’s singing
unveiling desires

now we share as one
sentimentality’s shawl
receiving our hearts

Mother_Earth
Senior Member

since 2000-11-20

Posts 1370
1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan

1 posted 2001-08-12 05:21 PM

Sunshine, so nicely wrapped up in love and understandings shawl. Lovely. ME

elusive1
Junior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 15
NC

2 posted 2001-08-12 05:51 PM

Sunshine - what a beautiful hommage and a very insightful journey. This struck a major chord with me - thanks!

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2001-08-12 06:20 PM

Sunshine your so good at senryus, really really beautiful, thank you sweet friend.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

4 posted 2001-08-12 06:45 PM

not an easy write ... but you've mastered it well

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-08-12 07:23 PM

Karilea~
So lovely ... softly spoken from the heart~

'timing of feelings
when unbidden come sweetest
deeply felt this joy'

*sighs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

6 posted 2001-08-12 07:52 PM

Very beautiful, Karilea! Well done!

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2001-08-12 08:47 PM

ahhh, just lovely!!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2001-08-12 09:03 PM

Gee! I just learn to do it one way, now you throw this at me (I do have a much greater appreciation for the beauty in this, and the work involved, with the understanding I've gained, whereas before I breezed past Haikus (this is what this is...right??)) but now, tell me what the difference in this Haiku and the way I did it is so I can try this...please....I understand this is not nature based but I don't quite catch the basis for the third line...

Oh well, should have asked this in email so I'll quit and just read and re-read till I figure it out...

Love the write though...but then, Sunshine wrote it, so would have anyway.

jwesley

Well! Just got finished reading Nan's definitions back in the Workshop forum and now assume this is Senryu??

me.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-12-2001).]

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