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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-08-12 08:24 AM


A Hint of Fall

the cool snuck up in behind
a passing front,
having gone through
earlier morn, thundering
its intent, noisily
spitting rain then torrents
come waves, but now,
gently, the day having
passed by as well, coolness
brushing warm cheeks in
promise, having lacked
scorching burn,
the scent of petunias peak
memories, junipers
fragrance the dog’s walk,
a feel of coming crunching
leaves to beware crickets
and still, I wait for summer
peaches to evolve, to taste
sun’s kiss once more
before the
first of fall

in scorched Bermuda
grass it stood, looking for
all in its time a piece of
thin iron, I plucked it up, to
find last year’s remnant
of a leaf, lace tattered, not yet
a skeleton for it had withered
and dried, mummified itself
on it’s own carcass of stem,
iron brown but retaining shape

if, if I were to put forefinger to
thumb with the desiccated remains
between to feel the pressure of
warm and blood and skin, it would
surely crumble and yet…yet

it withstood sun, wind, rain
and temperatures for its own season
then one more, still intact, still
…around… and I am caught up
in its labyrinth of time, this ageless
moment of capture that, if simply
placed in a spot of memory, it would
continue in its form of weathered
beauty, an aide memoire as even the
most fragile of God’s gifts have
value, that a greater Hand allowed
me to pick this leaf up for a reason, to
perhaps gild its edges in gold, a cue
to my soul that I attempt to age as
gracefully as this leaf…

the first of my Fall is coming
I shall not wait for it but
run to it, blessing
its welcome in
my spring’s
memory


© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-12 08:32 AM


I really loved your perspective in this poem, Sunshine. Standing in the present in anticipation while bringing the sweet memory of the past along. The passing of seasons, especially the transition, is a strong metaphor for our own life passages.

Thank you for this work, it is beatifully written in a soft and thoughtful voice.

Melissa

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-08-12 08:34 AM


it withstood sun, wind, rain
and temperatures for its own season
then one more, still intact, still
…around… and I am caught up
in its labyrinth of time, this ageless
moment of capture that, if simply
placed in a spot of memory, it would
continue in its form of weathered
beauty, an aide memoire as even the
most fragile of God’s gifts have
value, that a greater Hand allowed
me to pick this leaf up for a reason, to
perhaps gild its edges in gold, a cue
to my soul that I attempt to age as
gracefully as this leaf…

the first of my Fall is coming
I shall not wait for it but
run to it, blessing
its welcome in
my spring’s
memory
===========================

*smiling at you*
thats one awesome working of a metaphor my dear sun....
and Sunday morns are brighter because of you

Good Morning Lady Sun  



I know no one is to blame
In time youll feel strength when you call my name
I know Ill never hold you again
And I know Ill never be the same
VH

Rick
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Victoria, Australia
3 posted 2001-08-12 08:35 AM


Sunshine, this is a wonderfully captured moment, I could see and feel the leaf and know the feeling you speak of with the greater hand, I think we all feel this way at times, caught in the moment at one with our thoughts.

Great write.

Rick

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
4 posted 2001-08-12 09:07 AM


Wow ... Karilea ... I only get this same feeling when I pick up some carcass of last years road kill ... Perhaps someone up there is trying to tell me something !!!

Now with all joking aside ... what a lovely piece you've penned ... well worth my library

Rex

ethome
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5 posted 2001-08-12 09:19 AM


Wonderful work Karilea.........what a beautiful pattern of thought!   I really love Janet's comment and I echo it!
RSWells
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6 posted 2001-08-12 10:09 AM


Lots of good symbolism and imagery. Fall, the season is my favorite though I'm currently denied its more pronounced manifestations in this climate. Fall, the time of life is inevitable if one lives and should be a winding down, peaceful time. Amazing too the fragility of so many things that yet endure. Your leaf, a spiders web, a butterfly. Enjoyed (can you tell?)

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
7 posted 2001-08-12 06:36 PM


Had to come back and read this superb piece once again

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