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Aquamarine washes over me streaming.
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Aquamarine washes over me streaming. You are here before me in an unfamiliar moment in familiar surroundings flowing with busy voices, restless feet and hazy faces. But, like ghosts, I see through them to only ourselves: your current surrounds me, it tugs me, small waves building upon waves. How simple if I could wish away solidity, will myself porous, then let you filter through me, each cool touch and tendril threading my heat, each liquid strand mingling with mine. Yet I'm stranded, and your eyes flow freely, aquamarine washes onto me streaming even over sealed lips, which might part and drink. If only you would sweep me away from these struggling shadows and illuminated walls to where the wind shivers silently, the trees stand still and the leaves, speechless. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"your current surrounds me, it tugs me, small waves building upon waves. How simple if I could wish away solidity, will myself porous, then let you filter through me, each cool touch and tendril threading my heat, each liquid strand mingling with mine. " wow.......so completely breathtaking!!  I love this excellent!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely imagery, Maree. Very nicely done. All writing comes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
your current surrounds me, it tugs me, small waves building upon waves. How simple if I could wish away solidity, will myself porous, then let you filter through me, each cool touch and tendril threading my heat, each liquid strand mingling with mine. Yet I'm stranded, and your eyes flow freely, aquamarine washes onto me streaming even over sealed lips, which might part and drink. If only you would sweep me away from these struggling shadows and illuminated walls to where the wind shivers silently, the trees stand still and the leaves, speechless. ================================ Ok..so I cut and copied dang near the whole poem... its too hard to pick fave lines...this is awesome... masterful employ of imagery and metaphor DA very very cool write..achingly beautiful nice to see you posting again jm I know no one is to blame |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Maree, OMG hon this is beautiful!! lovely imagery you have here, flows beautifully throughout every line...you have such a cool way of expressing yourself, and this is one of your finer pieces (just my little opinion. take care sweets & I'll be in touch soon. Love ya, Amy "Don't make promises you can't keep |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is really beautiful! Mesmerizing imagery, cool and refreshing. The one who inspired this must be very special, indeed. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LittleDarkAngel~ Exquisite~ 'How simple if I could wish away solidity, will myself porous, then let you filter through me' I really like the originality of this thought~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
o yuh o yuh o yuh say it with me o yuh..Imagery is perfect yuh |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I am glad to see that as your technical ability grows you have not left the things that made you a natural poet behind. I bet you have become the teacher's pet...heh Love this dear. There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow! Maree, this is superb writing, hon...the thought like osmosis...Loved it! |
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citizenx Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 189motorcade |
How simple if I could wish away solidity, will myself porous, then let you filter through me, each cool touch and tendril threading Breathtaking is the word. WOW. shadows flicker sweet end tame |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
Lovely writing, it "seeped" right into me. "will myself pourous, then let you filter through me" Oh, what a powerful line! |
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furlong Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 129 |
It is indeed an extremely beautiful poem Maree. F |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
You have written a beautiful poem here. I agree with all above. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Now who's gorgeous? Smiling at you from across the ocean...you write from a tranquil place so deep inside, I do so envy that. (My writing methods resemble sort of an emotional catfight...) You're GORGEOUS. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Yet I'm stranded, and your eyes flow freely, aquamarine washes onto me streaming even over sealed lips, which might part and drink. If only you would sweep me away from these struggling shadows and illuminated walls to where the wind shivers silently, the trees stand still and the leaves, speechless' Breathtaking is the word that comes to my mind, as well...excellent write, Maree...the imagery is truly outstanding... sp  no power in creation, |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
speechless indeed. . . my friend the images and the feelings here are such that to speak them here would not do them justice. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Library There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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WRBreezin Member
since 2001-08-04
Posts 212 |
Compelling is my first thought, as each word has the substance of Soul! Greatly enjoyed! Willie |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
SEA, thank you so much for your "breathtaking" reply. I'm glad you loved it LW, thank you dear very much JM Thank you kindly for your always lovely words Miss Amy, well dear, I'm glad you liked it and I thank you for your lovely reply m'sweet. Yes, keep in touch. Midnitesun, "special" being the key word! Thank you for your wonderful reply LittleMarge *wink* Exquisite? Wow, Thank you so very very much O yuh O yuh O yuh O yuh, thanks Waltyyyyy Jamie, I have a most wonderful teacher and if it wasnt for him this poem would not be complete. So glad you liked and thank you for the wonderful compliment m'friend. Wow, Martie thank you very much for your lovely reply and the WOW! glad you liked.Citizex, Thank you so very much Jannette, I thank you so very much Furlong, Thank you, and I am glad you think so Constance, I thank you Me Sista,Me? Gorgeous? C'mon now BEAUTIFUL, I am only gorgeous, because you make me feel gorgeous. awwww. You pay me a wonderful compliment m'friend and I return it to you, for you too reach down deep inside of you and masterfully and beautifully pen your emotions. Snowpants, thank you so much for your lovely reply and for reading I do appreciate it.Sven, thank you so very much for your lovely words Jamie, hello again m'friend, doing a library thingy ey? Thank you so much dear Willie, Hi! and thank you so very much for stopping by and having a read and your wonderful reply. Thank you all wonderful poets, for your lovely replies and for taking the time to stop and read. I appreciate it so very much. Maree |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Can't help but wonder of the inspiration for this. WOW! Marvelous writing! |
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