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Rick
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since 2001-06-21

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Victoria, Australia

0 posted 2001-08-11 12:04 PM

Though blood from wounds within did dry
The tears still came with words goodbye
The nightmares from ones darkest sleep
Had come to haunt and thoughts to keep

The words that held the chest near numb
Had hidden deep, had never come
Regret, its stench, which drifts so long
Had come from death, from love now gone

© Copyright 2001 Rick Van Weenen - All Rights Reserved

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

1 posted 2001-08-11 12:58 PM

This was a very harsh reality of parting aftermath. Very touching poem my friend. Glad to hear you're okay, as I had to wonder

These are achingly painfull writes. But sometimes the pen does that.
Sincerely,
Regina

[This message has been edited by rwood (edited 08-11-2001).]

Duncan
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2 posted 2001-08-11 01:18 AM

You've captured the harshness this moment sometimes holds, very well.

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with you

3 posted 2001-08-11 01:24 AM

wow...this packs an emotional punch! great writing!

Snow

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desert flower looking for rain

4 posted 2001-08-11 03:20 AM

I thought this was
a very tight, emotional
read. well done.

snow

"Trace my body with your words
and in doing so, you touch my heart"
Snow

Kit McCallum

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5 posted 2001-08-11 02:14 PM

Oh Rick, I truly enjoy the flow in your words. You've captured the essence of regret so succinctly ... very well written, much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Irish Rose
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6 posted 2001-08-11 02:21 PM

God bless your heart!

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kay

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Listening to every heart

7 posted 2001-08-12 09:40 AM

...the shroud of dark has left in mist
the cumbersome grief of one last kiss...

well done Rick!

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

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8 posted 2001-08-12 10:03 AM

Some wounds never heal. Heartfelt and well written.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

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