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Sven
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0 posted 08-10-2001 01:00 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sven

don't judge me (friend)
       I've had enough (you)

yes, I've done
       some things
              and said
                     some things
                            that were
                                   wrong

and I'm sorry
       for that

it was never
       my intention
              to hurt (you)
                     and I know
                            that I did

and I know
       that nothing
              can change
                     what I did (friend)

but

I can change me

I can change
       the way
              that I act
                     I can change
                            the thoughts
                                   that I have

I can change

but

don't hold my
       past actions
              against me (friend)

especially when
       you don't know
              the whole story

grant me the
       power to be human
              and know that I did
                     have good feelings
                            at the start

but, you (friend) don't know
       what happened to me
              you don't know
                     what happened to us
                            but I do

I know (you know)

and yes, I didn't
       handle it well
              I handled it
                     poorly

and now, I have to live with my choices

but (you)

don't think that
       it was all me
              it wasn't

but

that's neither here
       not there

we're not here to assign blame

we just failed. . .
       I failed . . .
              you failed . . .

and in our failure, we ended. . .

and now, we deal with the ending of it all

and we move on. . .

because that is
       what happens
              you move on
                     I'm trying to (slowly)
                            you should as well (you have help)

but

don't judge me
       on my past (friend)
              judge me (if you must)
                     rather on
                            if my future

repeats itself. . . (you)

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2001 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 08-10-2001 01:07 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sven,
Judgement has a whole history, I enjoyed yours.
catalinamoon
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2 posted 08-10-2001 02:51 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Nice format, and a sad story told. I hope no one is judging you as less than a friend, because they would be wrong!
Sandra
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3 posted 08-10-2001 03:02 PM       View Profile for Constance   Email Constance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Constance

well-said, Sven. An individual who is willing to admit that he might have done a wrong thing has the potential to be a very good friend indeed. An admirable quality--and a lovely poem.
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4 posted 08-10-2001 03:02 PM       View Profile for wpwpoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wpwpoet

sven; to quote Christ "let he who is without sin cast the first stone." one of my favorite passages.
also to quote Josephus, a historian who lived around the time of christ. "history does not repeat itself, it seeks to fullfill itself"
you have a wonderful way with words...
peace love and understanding...wpwpoet
walker
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5 posted 08-10-2001 04:06 PM       View Profile for walker   Email walker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for walker

(you)know(friend),(we)humans are tough. Its not easy being(us).Very much enjoyed!
rwood
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6 posted 08-11-2001 10:43 AM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

Friends don't let Friends become judged!  Great verse and a great foundation of friendship is admitting wrong. Enjoyed!
Sincerely,
Regina
Sven
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7 posted 08-11-2001 10:49 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

thank you all. . . I've found that it's easy to do this. . . to judge based on past events. . . they happen (I've done it myself). . . and all we can do is try to forgive. . . and move on. . . people can change. . . we just have to believe that they can (and so do they). . . and yes, everyone has another side to them. . . even me. . . just because I don't show it to you. . . don't think that it's not there. . .

Sy, you are correct my friend, too much of one somedays. . . thank you for reading. . .

Sandra, I've been judged for a lot of things. . . and been found. . . well. . . let's just say that the jury's still out. . .    thank you my friend. . .

Constance, thank you for your words, and for reading. . .  

wpwpoet, well said my friend. . . indeed, let those words ring true. . . thank you. . .

walker, thank you (friend), you're right, it's not easy being (us), but (we) do try, don't (we)?     

Regina, sometimes, it's best to try to start over. . . and hope that forgiveness comes. . . thank you. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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8 posted 08-11-2001 01:50 PM       View Profile for NoteBook Pages   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NoteBook Pages

sometimes it is best to start over, this is a nice beginning.  well done


NBP  
Duncan
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I'm not sure what I found most intriging about this, the style or the content.  Both have given me pause.
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Sven,
   A wonderful piece! Sometimes the best of intentions can turn sour, and we are left to deal with the fallout.  All I know, is you are a precious friend to me  
          Love, Elise
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11 posted 08-11-2001 02:04 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"we just failed. . .
                          I failed . . .
                                 you failed . . .

                   and in our failure, we ended. . ."

Beautifully written Sven! It's sometimes so hard to pick up the pieces and move on ... but always ... we must, whether forgiveness comes with us or not. Much enjoyed your thoughts in this piece.  

Best wishes,
/Kit
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12 posted 08-11-2001 02:09 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Let those who have attained perfection, be the judges of others ... I submit I shall never climb to that plateau

Good writing
Rex
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The difficult thing is to move on, and sometimes the hardest is to forgive ourselves. I appreciate your words, very tender and thoughtful.  One of my favorite sayings goes like this: Every saint has a past and every sinner has a future, I'm not sure who said it but it is sometimes words I try to remember to live by.
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14 posted 08-11-2001 05:32 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

In places there are few you can trust, these words will do wonders. I love this, and your style is one I love as usual.   Keep writing, and that other side...well its none of anyone's business til you choose to make it so.   ((hugs))
Sven
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NBP, in new beginnings, we can find what we've been missing. . . thank you. . .  

Duncan, I'm glad that I could make you stop and think about this one. . . thank you for reading. . .

Elise, thank you. . . you're a good friend to me as well. . .  

Kit, thank you my friend. . . indeed, we must continue or become stagnant. . . thank you for your insight. . .

Rex, I know that I shall indeed never even come close. . . but, I can try to be me, and that's all. . . thank you. . .

Gemini, thank you for that quote. . . it's just what I've tried to say here. . . that sums it up very nicely. . . thank you. . .  

Temptress, I hope that they will make people think. . . and I shall continue to keep that other side under wraps my friend. . . thank you. . .  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

tracie66
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16 posted 08-12-2001 12:22 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Hi Sven my friend, I know it's been ages and I'm just peeking for a little time.

Well my friend I believe in you and I believe in what you said...well written
~HUGS~ Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


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17 posted 08-12-2001 04:35 AM       View Profile for oh2beme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for oh2beme

Oh Sven...yet another beautiful piece of art you have blessed us with. Very well penned and filled with emotion....Just Beautiful...Debbie
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18 posted 08-12-2001 03:03 PM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

people CAN change...but they have to WANT to...(patterns are too easily repeated)...loved your words as always...helen
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19 posted 08-12-2001 03:17 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Great expression of what friends truly are...enjoyed this very much...

jwesley
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20 posted 08-12-2001 03:31 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Alls I can say Sven is it's like this saying I read once....
A true friend is someone who knows who you are and likes you anyway.......

Judging is wrong, loving unconditionally is right.  I liked the presentation in this. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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21 posted 08-12-2001 06:26 PM       View Profile for inot2B   Email inot2B   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for inot2B

Without realizing some times we do judge others. All I can do is ask to be forgiven if I have done an injustice to you. Sometimes we read others and believe what we read. I know that is a mistake but have been known to get caught up in the writings of poets. For this I am truly sorry.
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************Clap * Clap * Clap ************

BRAVO!

I loved this one Sven!
Sven
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23 posted 08-13-2001 07:14 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

tracie, hello my wonderful friend, so nice to see you peeking in, and thank you for believing. . .

Debbie, thank you so much, glad that you enjoyed. . .

helen, you have said a mouthful. . . thank you my friend. . .  

jwesley, thank you my friend, true friends are rare to find. . .

GS, my thoughts exactly. . . thank you as always my wonderful friend. . .

inot2B, we all do it my friend. . . I know that I too have been guilty of it. . . so, please accept my apologies as well. . .    thank you. . .

Janette, thank you. . . thank you. . . bowing  

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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24 posted 09-20-2001 02:42 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

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