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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-08-10 08:18 AM


Rewrite:

Silence

Each night I beat
Upon deaths door
The beats resound
But nothing more

She was my church
My spire my shrine
God took back
What I took as mine.

My fleur-de-lis
My joie-de-vivre
My goal my soul
The heart of me

I call her name
It is the same
Only silence
Without reclaim

Only echoes’
Soar encore
My knocks upon
The astral door

I sail upon
A sea of grays
Inconsolable
Counting days.


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2001-08-10 08:25 AM


I call her name
It is the same
Only silence
Without reclaim

Only echoes’
Soar encore
My knocks upon
The astral door

I sail upon
A sea of grays
Inconsolable
Counting days.
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Oh Stinky this is wrenchingly beautiful
what a heartstring strummer...
and oh how well I know those echoes
(ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis)
me

I know no one is to blame
In time youll feel strength when you call my name
I know Ill never hold you again
And I know Ill never be the same
VH

Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 2001-08-10 08:26 AM


I must have missed the first one
This is beautiful and very touching
Liz

Sunshine
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3 posted 2001-08-10 08:51 AM



Loss.

Hurts.

And my ears bleed from the pounding on the doors.

Well done, Sy!

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17
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4 posted 2001-08-10 08:55 AM


Poised and poignant pours of pathos. Perfect and sad.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-08-10 01:03 PM


JM,
Love you too, winkiewinkie Stinky

Elizabeth,
Thank you Sy

Sunshine,
Thank you for the well done.

RSWells,
Powerful comment. Thank you.

Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2001-08-14 05:57 PM


wonderul write of Pathos... nicely done Seymour
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2001-08-14 06:46 PM


Cpat Hair,
Thank you.

vandana
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8 posted 2001-08-14 09:48 PM


enjoy
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2001-08-14 09:53 PM


Vandana,
Thank you.

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