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maeve
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0 posted 2001-08-09 08:34 PM


Hold me baby, hold on tight.
Love me till the morning light.
Kiss me till I cannot breathe.
Stay with me. Don’t let me leave
Touch me baby, tease me slow,
take me where we want to go.
Bring me rapture, bring me joy.
Play with me, I am your toy.
Build this fire within my soul.
Teach me, love me, make me whole

Take me home to Erin's shores,
to where my heart roams free.

© Copyright 2001 Maeve O'Donnell - All Rights Reserved
Parker
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1 posted 2001-08-10 02:20 AM


So what your saying is me be the master and you the student. hmmmmm, now where is my long ruler when I need it.  


maeve
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2 posted 2001-08-10 06:38 AM


Well if you think you can teach me something....go right ahead.  

Maeve

Take me home to Erin's shores,
to where my heart roams free.

EagleOne
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3 posted 2001-08-10 09:19 AM


I've read this one several times. Each time I see it a little differently, but I do like.

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison


SmittenKitten
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4 posted 2001-08-10 11:53 AM


I really enjoyed this....each sentence rolls easily off my tongue into the next one.  I hope you weren't denied in your request...I can't see why you would be!  
~Krista  

"Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you.
And all you can do is to go where they can find you."
~Winnie the Pooh

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5 posted 2001-08-10 01:09 PM


cliche???  well. . . not really. . . read it again. . .  

that's why I like this. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

maeve
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6 posted 2001-08-10 05:33 PM


EagleOne, glad you took the time to read it more than once   Thank you. Glad you liked.

Krista, Thank you and I don't think he will refuse me  

Sven, thanks for your comments.

Maeve

Take me home to Erin's shores,
to where my heart roams free.

MoonShadow
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7 posted 2001-08-10 06:53 PM


Nice sing-song, meter and rhyme. One cannot say it aloud without smiling... or grinning devilishly. I love it! ;-)
maeve
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8 posted 2001-08-10 07:01 PM


MoonShadow, glad you got the idea   I wanted to give someone a devilish grin.

Maeve

Take me home to Erin's shores,
to where my heart roams free.

Butterflies_dont_cry
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9 posted 2001-08-10 11:29 PM


I'm sure you brought on the reaction you
wanted...this is a great write with the
right amount of *zing* to capture the eye of
the one it was intended for I'm sure  

Thank you for the kind comments on both the
duet and on my poem...they are much
appreciated~

maeve
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10 posted 2001-08-11 12:47 PM


Butterflies, I'm sure I got his attention.   Thank you for taking the time to read and reply  

Maeve

Take me home to Erin's shores,
to where my heart roams free.

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11 posted 2001-08-11 03:04 AM


Now I pictured you as "no one" that would write this and I was so pleasantly surprised to read this. I loved it!  Get your ruler indeed!  You have a great sense of humor I love that.  

Also, thank you for reading my work as well while I have the opportunity to have your undivided attention...see I taught you something, use the comment section for dual purpose     Great job on this

To see real beauty ~ being blindfolded helps!   ~* Mysteria *~

maeve
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12 posted 2001-08-11 07:41 PM


Mysteria, Glad you enjoyed it. It is amazing what you will write when you are inspired,  and he does inspire me a lot.
And thanks for the little lesson. I'll keep it in mind.

Maeve

Take me home to Erin's shores,
to where my heart roams free.

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