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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2001-08-09 01:19 PM


Red roses
Gripped too tight in blind anger
From each thorn
A stream formed,
Flowing down a silk skinned arm,
He did bring
Offering,
Hoping the gift would sooth her;
Give a smile,
After while,
She’d surely fall for his charm,
Anger grows,
Blooms lash with intent to harm.

Gloom


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Lady In White
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1 posted 2001-08-09 02:02 PM



I might even say I see the red rose's blush go up to the cheeks of her face, the anger is so explicit...

well done, Prof. Gloom...

Irish Rose
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2 posted 2001-08-09 02:07 PM


Roses are classic aren't they?  Personally, I'm holding out for daisies as roses have kind of lost their meaning for me but I enjoyed this.

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kay

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3 posted 2001-08-10 08:34 AM


Hi Professor,

It's amazing how beauty can have such pain attached, great write, enjoyed.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2001-08-10 11:01 AM



Thank you, Lady
I am pleased you like,
It is hard to hide emotions at times.

Thank you, Kay,
Roses are classics, as you probably well know,
But still it’s the classics that give the most
Symbolism.

Thank you, Cerenity,
Roses are an good example of the duality of things,
Beauty and pain.
I appreciate you taking the time to read and respond.

Gloom

nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2001-08-10 06:48 PM


One rose ~~~
a smile...and your charm...just enough
@}--}--~
~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Snooganzmeister32
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6 posted 2001-08-10 08:13 PM


Wow... *teases* everyone can write a poem about roses, now what about daffoldils?
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7 posted 2001-08-11 01:43 AM


I loved the use of the roses to show the anger and the pain in this one.  The emotions were teeth clenching actually.  I wondered what he had done actually, and you know me now I want to write a poem about what he did - oh dear!  This was great my friend.

To see real beauty ~ being blindfolded helps!   ~* Mysteria *~

Titia Geertman
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8 posted 2001-08-11 05:58 PM


Thanks Prof, you used the rose in this verse superb...beauty and pain, hope and despair,
it's all their within a rose.

Thanks, Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
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Lone Wolf
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9 posted 2001-08-11 06:01 PM


Wonderful depiction of emotions here.  Nicely done.

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by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

RSWells
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10 posted 2001-08-11 08:20 PM


Foreboding and a fiery forecast.
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