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Martie
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0 posted 2001-08-07 07:24 PM



I have lost my splendor

though I know it curled around me
just last night
and caught me in a dream

delight was the title
that tossed me about on my pillow
my hair a dark mask across my pale

I woke within its dwelling
holding still the capture of it
winding it with pieces of colored laughter
and sealing it with a song

the tune was so clear with violin
searing across the open space
that blinked into the ceiling
that I was sure I could play
the shuttered instrument
that dust covers under the bed

I have lost my splendor

though I remember how it felt
the sea green crash of it around my legs
the taste of the salty human it held
and I know a fragrance of recall
waits around the corner
out in the go-beyond
with the new mown grass
past the rain

© Copyright 2001 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2001-08-07 07:43 PM


I beg to disagree, Martie. You haven't lost  even an ounce of your splendor! You must not be seeing the same person that the rest of us are seeing. In fact, I think you are bordering on spectacular!   Beautiful poem!
Lone Wolf
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2 posted 2001-08-07 07:46 PM


Very vivid images here, Martie.  I'm with Denise, you've lost nothing!  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

shadow974
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3 posted 2001-08-07 07:50 PM


You've got it, Beautiful poem.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

snowpants
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4 posted 2001-08-07 09:51 PM


Though I also disagree, Martie, you've penned a great description of this feeling...very nicely written!

sp  

no power in creation,
no mortal complication,
will ever stop me from being with you...

Sunshine
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5 posted 2001-08-07 10:02 PM



No splendor? just open wonder
at what would cast asunder any
thought that might dispel the
cast of Martiesque dwell...

my friend, you are
magic
always....

Martie
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6 posted 2001-08-08 01:10 AM


-You are all so sweet..now I feel like I was asking for you to tell me I hadn't lost it...when what I was trying to say was that I just have been feeling depleted of excitement of something...sheesh, must be the heat.
Janet Marie
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7 posted 2001-08-08 12:35 PM


Well If I FIND IT....IM KEEPING IT!!  
It will make for one hell of a muse *L*
You and your poetry is Splendor..
me

wont you sing me your poetry
wont you take me to your home
wont you be for me forever
so Ill never be alone
youre my dream, its a beautiful thing

Denise
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8 posted 2001-08-08 06:59 PM


I've been feeling like that lately too, Martie. I guess it's just a part of the cycle of life. Sometimes you feel fulfilled, on top of the world, sometimes you feel bored, sometimes restless, sometimes you feel lower than dirt, most of the time you hover somewhere in between the top and the bottom. Go see a good movie, go shopping, visit a friend. Most importantly, stay out of this heat!! Whatever you do, don't stop writing!!  
Irish Rose
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9 posted 2001-08-08 07:18 PM


I am speechless, the words here are so vividly real and well, they are open and honest. Martie, you have gained much! Not lost..gained!

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kay

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10 posted 2001-08-13 05:14 PM


This is so pretty.
Your imagery is quite remarkably done.

*If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours*



Logan
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11 posted 2001-08-13 06:36 PM


Ahh, Martie, it is just out there, there where that rainbow is striking the ground. For only the rainbow could be as beautiful as your words...very gentle smile
VAS
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12 posted 2001-08-13 06:45 PM


every now and then, do we not lose the excitement of childish wonder, all too often, perhaps...one thing wonderful about being a writer, we learn to look at things more deeply and can regain that childish excitement/wonder as we ponder the magnificence of God's luscious creation and marvel at how wonderfully it works, when we don't mess with it unnecessarily

you have not lost any splendor, Martie, maybe just lie down in the grass, uh-hum, in the shade, and seek the realm of the flora and fauna with seeking eyes, and as delicate as dragonfly wings, surely your wonder will return...yet your words have far from left you...you still know how to sprinkle them on the page to season your writing toward perfection

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