Where My True Love Waits, Part II . . . A sonnet duet with SEA

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Where My True Love Waits, Part II . . . A sonnet duet with SEA

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

0 posted 2001-08-07 03:36 PM

Where My True Love Waits, Part II
A sonnet duet with Sea

Pacing quarterdeck, willing ship homeward,
throwing on canvas she can safely hold
All hands bringing her about unhampered.
The air they breathe is urgency controlled.
Darkness encroaches, nearing rocky coast.
He cries "ease to port," enveloping fog
obscures all, even the heavenly host.
Unable to see he furls sail, agog,
knowing she is near. A beam cuts the veil,
a faithful beacon once again savior
he is safe. The waters he does assail,
as need claws at the heart of this sailor
will she be waiting, for her love’s return?
Seeing her eyes, only then will he learn.

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Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-08-07 03:50 PM

A beautiful sonnet...the beauty of two poetic minds penning this is a wonderful display of poetry in motion...

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-08-07 05:09 PM

Thank you Lady

Interloper is the best
I had a lot of fun learning how to do a sonnet.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-08-07 08:52 PM

Unable to see he furls sail, agog,
knowing she is near. A beam cuts the veil,
a faithful beacon once again savior
he is safe. The waters he does assail,
as need claws at the heart of this sailor
will she be waiting, for her love’s return?
Seeing her eyes, only then will he learn
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this is wonderful you two..
the vocab and phrasing is perfect poetry
and the cadence flow was a delite to read aloud.
sonnets are so lovely to read...
very well done

wont you sing me your poetry
wont you take me to your home
wont you be for me forever
so Ill never be alone
youre my dream, its a beautiful thing

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-08-07 09:17 PM

Janet~ coming from one with talent I can only wish for,

thank you

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-08-07 09:22 PM

Very well done, you two make a great team!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

BrightStar
Member

since 2001-04-08

Posts 219

6 posted 2001-08-08 06:45 PM

Beautiful.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2001-08-08 08:46 PM

Lone Wolf~ yes, he is awesome to work with!

thank you

Bright Star~

thank you

"Four be the things I'd been better without: Love, curiosity, freckles and doubt."
-- Dorothy Parker, on herself

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