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rascalx
Senior Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA

0 posted 2001-08-07 01:03 AM

Dark clouds on my horizon
Wishing for warm summer rains to wash my life away

drip dry

leaving me a clear colorless slate

Can you see inside me?
Or are you looking through me?

and as I reach for a new box of crayons
(the biggest box they make ya'know
because life has too many hues and shades
to be limited to red, yellow, and blue)
I can't stop myself from wondering
Do you want to help color me too?

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-08-07 01:06 AM

This is fantastic...twould be marvelous to the right person just for you.

Such a lovely, vulnerable thing to say/ask. Superb.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2001-08-07 03:08 AM

Let me know how you make out I may get some of those crayons too! What a great piece of writing, and you absolute never disappoint the reader with the quality of your work, well done.

~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~
~* Mysteria *~

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

3 posted 2001-08-07 09:20 AM

Jeff this is wonderful. Showing playfulness behind the longing. Or is that the other way around?

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

4 posted 2001-08-07 03:20 PM

This reminds me of the school psychologist who was wondering why the little boy always drew his pictures with a black crayon....and the little boy said "because that's all that's left...."

ah yes, nothing like a new box of crayons, and supersize me, please....

enjoyed!

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

5 posted 2001-08-07 03:44 PM

Here's one of my poems you might like.

              Coloring book

          Color the cow green
          The grass black and white
          Color outside the lines
          It's OK!

paladin

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

6 posted 2001-08-07 05:08 PM

I can't stop myself from wondering
Do you want to help color me too?
----------------

A really powerful and wonderful piece.....

So much is said within these crayons you hold....

Thank you.......
**************************

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-08-07 06:33 PM

I brought my own crayons if you don't mind. . .

great job my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2001-08-07 06:47 PM

rascalx--

I like the way you used the crayon and colors to illustrate what you are feeling. Very well done!

rascalx
Senior Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA

9 posted 2001-08-07 08:48 PM

Vas,
I actually wrote this with someone specific in mind (although she doesn't know it! heh heh

) I agree that it would be so wonderful to be able to ask this of that "special someone" that all of us yearn for.

Mysteria,
Thank you so much for your kind compliments. And while you're here, take some crayons for yourself! lol This is one of those BIG boxes; I have plenty to share. Hey, who's hogging the "forest green" crayon?

Dee,
Thank you! Hmmm...maybe I long to be playful? or maybe I want to play for a long time?... (actually, I'm making light of my desire to be fulfilled by someone else's love

)

Lady in White,
Those super fat crayons are too cool. lol Especially when you're coloring blue sky! Just grab that sucker in your fist and start scrawling like a preschooler on a sugar high! (with my tongue sticking out of the side of my mouth as I concentrate!

)

Paladin,
     LINES? You have lines on your paper? Darn, no wonder I'm having problems! lol
Thanks for the cute poem. (green is my favorite color too so I say let's hear it for green cows)

MyEnchanted Melody, Martie,
     Thank YOU for reading; I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Sven,
     Since you brought your own crayons, can I borrow your blue for a sec? Someone "bogarted" mine! lol Hey, who broke the burnt sienna? SHEESH!
     Thank you, my friend; I always look forward to your kind and intuitive responses.

                             -  Jeff

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

10 posted 2001-08-22 10:34 PM

Jeff-
   I've always had a thing for crayons..LOL!
   This is really cool...like it lots!

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

11 posted 2001-08-23 01:47 AM

Hmm..Yanno, if someone colors you doesn't that make your sort of not yourself or does that add a certain special touch like the color of friends and lovers in our lives?

Well..made me think, it did! I enjoyed this, but obviously passed it up along the way.

Hope you're well!

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

12 posted 2001-08-23 07:44 AM

hey jeffy..i love to color..pass me a red crayon

this is a great one jeff..youre poet has really come out of hiding aye?

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"i believe we are here for a reason.
as each day unfolds,
we see less of the shadow
and more of the sun" -unknown

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