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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2001-08-06 06:27 PM



I never thought I would smile again
until you proved to me that I could,
but I really don't believe it much
cuz I never thought that I would.
But somehow, you have showed me
that I really could be wrong,
but Lord how I do wish
that I had the strength.....
to be strong.

Yet strength is that one thing
that I gave up on.......long ago,
and it will not begin again
until the flower is ready to grow.
It seems only to be wilting
on this withered vine instead,
and that is just a feeling
that I have come to dread.

Somehow, it really doesn't matter~
it just don't matter anymore,
it's time to take that final step-
and it's time to close that door.
I just pray I find the strength
Lord give me strength~
to be strong.

And Lord, if there is a next time,
please,
please don't let me be so wrong.
08-06-01

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2001-08-06 06:38 PM


Taking that step IS a sign of strength so don't discount it one bit.  Wonderful write and very honest in it's portrayal of what we all go through at different times in our life.
wpwpoet
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since 2001-07-25
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2 posted 2001-08-06 06:43 PM


fear not for the vine is not dead; just needs a little pruning
Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2001-08-06 06:45 PM


I just wish that were true, and I were that strong.  thanks Mark.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 08-06-2001).]

Terryloveiris_85
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since 2001-04-23
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The middle of nowhere
4 posted 2001-08-06 07:08 PM


i have nothing 2 say......i loved this poem. that's about it....amazingly enough 4 the first time i have nothing 2 say. great job.
*hugs*
~iris

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Duncan
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5 posted 2001-08-07 02:15 AM


Your poem seems sad but I liked the way you wrote it.
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6 posted 2001-08-07 02:19 AM


Very well done on one of life's moments - trail and errors of life happen, and we manage to keep looking for that "rigth one"!

~ To see real beauty you must look with your heart ~
           ~* Mysteria *~

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2001-08-07 10:58 PM


thank u all.  thanks.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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