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SEA
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0 posted 2001-08-06 11:16 AM


I keep within me
Many rooms
Places to keep my treasures
Memories of people
That matter to my heart
Rooms that echo laughter ~ radiate joy
Rain resounding in tinkling tempo
To the roar of the sea
I walk these halls…..
I visit these rooms…..
And I am given to smile


Yet within me
Are rooms of darkness
Emotions I fear
This burgundy rage
I am unable
To control
So that remains
A door
I have yet to open.


………..don’t test the lock………..

~SEA~



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1 posted 2001-08-06 11:26 AM


Wonderful!  Leave that lock alone!  Well done, gal!

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2 posted 2001-08-06 11:27 AM



O very very good SEA....but someone is jiggling the handle....I hear it moving....

Well done!

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3 posted 2001-08-06 02:29 PM


Emotions I fear
This burgundy rage
I am unable
To control
So that remains
A door
I have yet to open.
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"burgundy rage" ... very very cool image...
but I hate to tell ya girlie...sooner or later those rooms gotta be swept out...
otherwise the cobwebs will smother us...
the dust will choke us...
I gotta a whole Hotel of these rooms...
the elevator quit..gotta take the steps...
one at a time  
cool poem Sea....write it out...think of your pen as the cleaning crew.

wont you sing me your poetry
wont you take me to your home
wont you be for me forever
so Ill never be alone
youre my dream, its a beautiful thing

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4 posted 2001-08-06 02:41 PM


It's good to know oneself...and to warn others!  LOL  Good one, SEA.
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5 posted 2001-08-06 04:07 PM


"Don't Test The Lock!"  Whoa now, shut my mouth and throw away the keep...steppin' easy here ...(hee, hee).

Really liked this Sea, but couldn't resist a little fun...and I do mean it that way.  Insightful (and sometimes oneself is the hardest of all people to read)and well said.

jwesley

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6 posted 2001-08-06 04:10 PM


I like this one, self exploration. Keep that key to yourself
JamesMichael
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7 posted 2001-08-06 04:16 PM


Yes fortunately we can put away some of the pain for another day when we are better equiped to handle it...James
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8 posted 2001-08-06 04:34 PM


SEA, sweetheart, I so enjoyed this one. I mean, you really showed your stuff with these lines. I felt that lock turning and man, I just loved this.
"This burgundy rage"  Gosh, I love this line!!!




" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kay

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 08-06-2001).]

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9 posted 2001-08-06 06:34 PM


don't test the lock indeed. . . and possibly place another one there. . .

well done SEA, I really liked the ideas of this one, as well as "burgundy rage". . . that's a great phrase. . .  

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10 posted 2001-08-06 07:40 PM


You have rooms and I have holes in the dirt.........well now......how do you suppose that looks from the inside of my head?  Seriously, this was a cool write and as much as I hate to say it.......JM is right, you will oneday have to open them doors and sweep up the clutter.  Nicely penned and expressed.
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11 posted 2001-08-07 10:53 AM


enjoy
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12 posted 2001-08-07 11:19 AM


Thanks for the warning.
Excellent!

Melton

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13 posted 2001-08-07 02:13 PM


SEA~
This is a fine penning~
The corridors of the heart and mind are explored
as time and circumstance allow~
Nice done, sweetie~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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14 posted 2001-08-07 03:23 PM


Beautifully done Sea, and I too have a room like that!  It is not a pretty sight either, lol.  I loved this one.

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15 posted 2001-08-07 03:30 PM


Very clever write SEA. Put another lock on that door!

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

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16 posted 2001-08-07 03:31 PM


SEA-
   This is awesome!  
   Very cool write, indeed!
   There is much to learn and gain
   by exploring those rooms over time.
   Wonderfully penned, my friend.

   hugs,
   ~vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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17 posted 2001-08-07 09:21 PM


SEA,
  
    Ohh I like I like Very well written and soo easy to relate to. I have quite a few doors that I am afraid to approach let alone open... but they will open.. in time.

TaraB

SEA
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18 posted 2001-08-07 09:29 PM


thank you all very much....
there are just some areas within me
I simply don't trust....
so I keep those doors locked

I suppose, eventually I will have to sweep them out, but I don't think they will ever be empty.....

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