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Martie
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0 posted 2001-08-05 04:22 PM



  Her Frozen Naked Thoughts

She was covered with so many layers
brown bags full of old feelings
zip locked longing
double bagged and frozen naked thoughts

One day she looked inside one
and was surprised to see how young
and full of folly was the content of lost youth
you see she had marked it such with the date
l960 something with indelible marker

She had been so afraid of looking within
until she did and found it
not full blown and pulsing
but withered and looking dumb

So she realized
that something as tiny as a sliver hurts
if left to fester
and a bag of frozen feelings
is too heavy to carry around



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Denise
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1 posted 2001-08-05 04:27 PM


Full of wisdom, Martie, and told so beautifully!
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2 posted 2001-08-05 04:52 PM


well all I have to say is BRAVO. I sure don't want to end up an old "bag lady"  

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kay

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3 posted 2001-08-05 04:57 PM


Martie,
Wonderful write, enjoyed. Sy

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4 posted 2001-08-05 07:13 PM



that should teach one not to open old baggage....well done Martie! This is a keeper, and one to share...

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5 posted 2001-08-05 07:16 PM


Ahh, Martie, a smart one you are...very gentle smile
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6 posted 2001-08-05 07:37 PM


Wisely written and excellently told.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

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7 posted 2001-08-05 11:50 PM


My, my now that was very clever!  

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8 posted 2001-08-10 12:10 PM



Martie-
   Wow!  Very powerful thoughts here...

      "She was covered with so many layers
      brown bags full of old feelings
      zip locked longing
      double bagged and frozen naked thoughts"
      _________________

      "So she realized
      that something as tiny as a sliver hurts
      if left to fester
      and a bag of frozen feelings
      is too heavy to carry around"


   Much wisdom and truth in these lines, my friend.
   Wonderfully done.

   hugs,
   ~vicky

  

"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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