some monkey business--20 words or less #1

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Open Poetry #15

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2001-08-04 09:45 PM

a monkey
tried to snatch
my ice-cream away

I saved my indulgence,

and lost empathy
for the unthinking man

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

1 posted 2001-08-04 09:46 PM

i wonder if i have gotten my meaning across...please tell me if you are baffled by this and i will gladly explain it to you...

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

2 posted 2001-08-04 10:28 PM

You were tempted to indulge in something forgiven, almost didn't, but changed your mind and did it anyway????

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-08-04 11:51 PM

Faterider,
You always take a chance when you write symbolically. Your symbols change with each reader. By an act of ungrace you lost sympathy.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2001-08-05 12:05 PM

I'll admit, I'm baffled by the last two lines, but it may be because I'm taking the remainder literally. So you can explain to me if you wish.

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