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Open Poetry #15

If we had Lived

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-08-04 07:17 PM

If we had chosen then to live this way
To lace our nights with fringe of velvet fear
Allowing deep desires to live instead
Of folding up the night when morning’s near

While stars will mystify the watching eye
With spinning all my senses as they will
Perhaps I should not have notions to fly
Being anchored in concrete and steel

I could have freely opened up the gate
Escaping into the next morning’s light
To live far beyond an endless night’s wait
To walk into the garden of delight

With skin paled stretched on fragile bones passed youth
Can’t wait for dawning, drowning in dreams truth.

Gloom
Inspired by Elizabeth Santos’ “If We Had Loved - A Sonnet”
Actually I have taken a bit of liberty with her excellent work.
I hope she doesn’t mind.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-08-04 08:07 PM

wow...this is really good

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2001-08-04 08:10 PM

I'll second that wow, this is so well expressed!

Melissa~

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2001-08-05 12:11 PM

Thank you Sea and Melissa,
I am glad you enjoyed.

Gloom

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2001-08-05 11:16 PM

You were well inspired, I went to read Elizabeth's and got where you decided to go, and when you did your images were wonderful as usual. Thank you for a great read!

~To see real beauty you must first look with your heart~
~* Mysteria *~

Terryloveiris_85
Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

5 posted 2001-08-06 11:02 AM

wow, i really liked this one. very deep.
~iris

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

goodness is found in the heart, not the money.

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