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Zinsser
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0 posted 2001-08-04 11:05 AM



Time


Minutes strung together
Hours, Days, Months
Rolling on, Rolling on

Years Pass

Reunited
Minutes strung together
Making each one count
Go too fast
Connie McDonald
Copyright@2001

[This message has been edited by Zinsser (edited 08-04-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Connie McDonald - All Rights Reserved
MARK V SHELDON
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1 posted 2001-08-04 11:47 AM


Connie, I know what you mean -- I like the contrast you've set up between the two stanzas -- one of "rolling on" ad-infinitum and the other where you can't make them last long enough...  Nice job.  (Check the typo on the word "Monthes" in the first stanza).

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

VAS
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2 posted 2001-08-04 12:26 PM


fresh way of speaking on time


Zinsser
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3 posted 2001-08-04 03:33 PM


Mark & VAS
Thank You Both very much
: )

           Thank You
         ~~~Connie~~~

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2003-11-25 01:58 AM


Connie~
Though you haven't been here for a long while, I hope that someday you will return to see what we admirers still think of your beautiful poetry~

I miss you and your poetry~
Hope the holiday season finds you happy~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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5 posted 2004-04-16 12:25 PM


sigh
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