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Concrete Ages |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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What is there to do but bleed yesterday onto walkways in need of repair? Concrete ages you know. I think it is beautiful, in moderation, and it’s crevices cradle liquid with such purpose. I am flattered that it deems me worthy of what is underneath, which is what really matters. Each of the secret pools being swallowed by the only thing that knows how, by the only thing that absorbs what seeps. And I offer all I have, although it’s midnight and I am tired. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Spitfire, Symboles have tentacles that reach so far. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What is there to do but bleed yesterday onto walkways in need of repair? ============================== and it’s crevices cradle liquid with such purpose. =============================== Each of the secret pools being swallowed by the only thing that knows how, by the only thing that absorbs what seeps. And I offer all I have, although it’s midnight and I am tired. ========================== How do you do this??? how can you give us so much imagery and intensity of emotion and do it in so few words...feeling the angst here A... and look at you working those metaphors.. what a very cool write... nice to see you here sweet poetess  jmslow burn ... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
SpitFire-- The imagery in this is filled with despair, but also hope. What is underneath, IS what is important. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
these images are just excellent. . . well done SpitFire. . .  ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Geez....I just love your writing Spitfire! I've tried to imitate it, but fail miserably...in awe of you. jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-03-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I could not say it better than J.M. she picked all the places that stood out for me as well I have to tell you, I thought for a minute she called you 'sweet potatoes' then I focused better and saw poetess...heh heh heh kind of like 'potatoes' though, even though I don't really know you well enough to give you a nickname other than the your pseudonyn |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Concrete Ages indeed... You're certainly worthy to walk those walks, SpitFire... |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
You take such off the wall images and give them emotion and depth. Love it as always! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Alicia, I don't know how I missed this brilliant piece of writing. The imagery is excellent and to do it in so few words. Your talent is incredible. Maree into my library it goes. |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Spitfire you have wonderfully said so much in a small space, the images, just great, very much enjoyed. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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poetsguild Member
since 2001-08-12
Posts 85Florida |
And I offer all I have, although it’s midnight and I am tired. That's a lot. Well said. Concrete abstractions. |
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