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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-08-03 05:10 PM



There

silently
I cry
in the shower
where
I lose
all my emotional
power

don’t
have to
hold up too
strong
my secret
place taking
no one
along

there

tears
flow just for
me
trickling down
the drain
free

they
are tears
I need to
cry
with no one
to question
why

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet)  Shakespeare

© Copyright 2001 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
rwood
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793
Tennessee
1 posted 2001-08-03 07:20 PM


Perfect place of sanctuary. And I thought I was the only one. If I have to really let it out, I get in the whirlpool and turn the jets on so no one can hear. A private cry is good medicine sometimes! Great and touching verse.
Sincerely,
Regina

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA
2 posted 2001-08-03 07:53 PM



Excellent use of a metaphor, oh boy, do I ever relate.  Once again, your writing moves me.
Have you ever thought of getting your poems published?!  

Melissa~

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 08-03-2001).]

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3 posted 2001-08-03 08:23 PM


sometimes, it's the only place that we can be alone. . .

well done helen. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

g-hm
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since 2001-05-16
Posts 85

4 posted 2001-08-03 10:33 PM


A good cry is good for the soul.
jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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Spring, Texas
5 posted 2001-08-03 11:17 PM


Loved the whole thing, but LOVED the last stanza!

jwesley

JLR
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since 2001-02-04
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6 posted 2001-08-03 11:50 PM


Seems something others, including myself, relate to much.  Be well.
Zinsser
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since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641
Calif.
7 posted 2001-08-04 12:40 PM


Well done.... can relate well
Sorry about your pain... truely

[This message has been edited by Zinsser (edited 08-04-2001).]

Saunni
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777
West Virginia
8 posted 2001-08-04 02:25 AM


I can so relate! You wrote about it so well!  

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

1slippery_lady
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since 2001-07-20
Posts 20
Ohio, USA
9 posted 2001-08-14 09:55 PM


You express yourself so beautifully, you make ME cry.

Love you Sis  

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