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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-08-03 08:34 AM


The grasp of panic

this conceal,
this harboring inside,
it,
an unnamed dread
a fright, anxiety
your name is
it
in my head

even knowing
it
does not relieve
nor reprieve
nor cast aside all
this grief

attended as if
it were whole and
in this hold
stands a puppet
to bear alone

facing you,
for it is
a fearsome thing,
nothing one would allow
harboring ‘round
dearest kin nor kith
nor any being, yet
it,
in terror, brings

memory of long decades
gone bye yet
it still comes,
a silent
cry unheard,
a tuberculosis
pain of preventative
needling to insure
further
grief lessening

a lance of metal’s thin
breaks beneath
skin of child who
then cries, wild
and then
rush of physicians
whom, in one’s pain

tried to gain
esteem

in a child’s eyes
false heroes in the
flash of distress

body, strange,
estranged
memory from moment
lessened foment
but inside, it reigned,

needling of any sort
brings about
the pain

in the faint there
is no feint
as in recall one would
mark an epitome
of time

in a realize, but…
it will not allow
compromise

even when the
grasp is
loose between

it harbors in silent
waiting


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 08-03-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-08-03 08:53 AM


yes IT does grasp...

Nicely done...

Rick
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since 2001-06-21
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2 posted 2001-08-03 09:35 AM


Dear Sunshine, again unsure, but do you carry the pain of decades, do you carry a burden which a child has ladened you with, does some kind of nightmare haunt?
If so, I hope sharing these words will help, I read your piece a few times, very moving and I had the feel of sadness.
Try smiling a little more and thinking happy thoughts

Be well, your stories tell.

Rick

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3 posted 2001-08-03 10:42 AM


Whatever causes IT to grasp, IT is an unwelcome companion and you've written well the wish to walk free of IT and the frustrated plodding when IT won't leave. This is a sad and haunting piece, very well done.
Tiersdin
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4 posted 2001-08-03 11:17 AM


I understand "it" very well...

*hugs*

~Tier

Samia
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5 posted 2001-08-03 07:25 PM


Hi Sunshine, I just found a ring that I'd lost a few days ago.  My parents had given it to me for graduation and it was a symbol of their love and trust and pride in me.When I first realized that the ring wasn't on the familiar place on my finger, I paniced! I was gripped by IT. But I just found the ring. so I'm feeling much better.
Anyway,  I loved the poem. Your poetry is so well expressed. Panic can be vague, or poignant, being with out it is a blessing.    
Love be with you,
Samia

Martie
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6 posted 2001-08-03 07:30 PM


Karilea--The feeling is so intense that you convey in this...and the words impressed my thought.  Well done!
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