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kaile
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0 posted 2001-08-02 12:14 PM


I was glad I was to be your little girl
We would have had so much fun
playing Barbie dolls and sewing dresses
But you frowned deeply
when you saw the colours change
Why, mummy, why didn't you welcome me?

I was looking forward to meeting Dad
A tall strong kindly figure he would be,
bringing me to the zoo and teaching me baseball
But you sobbed as you confided in Granny
that Daddy was irresponsible and had abandoned us
What, mummy, does "irresponsible" and "abandoned" mean?

I kicked you playfully the other day
Giggling, I squealed in delight
I thought we would have a nice game of touch-a-boo
But you yelled loudly
and your hands pounded heavily on my delicate body
Why, mummy, why did you play so rough?

I was bubbling in excitement
I was growing bigger by the day
Soon, I would be able to see your lovely face
But you put enormous tapes, hurting me so
So that your bulge wouldn't show
Why, mummy, why weren't you proud of me?

I see white angels before me
I wriggle my little fingers, delighted
that you have asked them to play with me
But they all look so stern and fierce
Now, they are even cutting me up with sharp knives
Why, mummy, why do you put me through such pain?

I hear your heart-wrenching sniffles
I hear Granny trying to cajole you to "eat a little"
I long to go over and comfort you
But everything seems so dark around here
I struggle to crawl towards you, however I trip and fall
Why, mummy, why have things turned out to be this dismal?

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cpalmer
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1 posted 2001-08-02 12:21 PM


This is incredible! So sad but well said...I believe everyone in the world needs to read this one! Im being serious...it is very good!
Cindi

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2 posted 2001-08-02 12:30 PM


"I see white angels before me
I wriggle my little fingers, delighted
that you have asked them to play with me
but they all look so stern and fierce
Now, they are even cutting me up with sharp knives"

What profound, haunting images - yet, so sadly true.  Very powerful!

Sighs, the impact this poem has on me cannot be described.  This is very moving and disturbingly perfect.

I used to be totally against abortion, I was disgusted with any woman who could murder a human life, and this poem certainly supports my view.  But, over the years, I've become "Switzerland" and I try my best to understand both views. Although I would never ever get an abortion, I can understand why a rape victim would get one or if the doctor requests that the mother gets an abortion because the baby is ill, etc.

Thank you for re-posting it   This is one of your best.

Melissa~

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3 posted 2001-08-02 01:18 PM


thank you for your very ego-boosting comments, cpalmer and melissa

melissa, i believe strongly that life itself is the most important gift that one can have and no one should ever be denied a chance to explore life. i embrace life, am constantly seeking ways to enrich my experiences and outlook and simply don't understand how someone can abort her child because it came "untimely"??

of course, as you so rightly pointed out, there are other factors to consider too and i shouldn't be judgemental...

i'm flattered to realise that this musing had such an impact on you. a million thanks for letting me know...

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4 posted 2001-08-02 02:21 PM


This is much more than a musing, Kaile. It is a powerful perspective from the viewpoint of the victim of this scenario. I had written something long ago about the thoughts of a dog who was being led to a gassing room at the pound due to a shortage of space, the happy,bubbly nature of the puppy, the willingness to love and the hope to be loved and given a good home. Of course one does not compare dogs and humans even when both are only asking for a chance at life but one wonders how our thoughts may change if we were able to see it from the other side. This is an excellent piece of writing that you have the right to be very proud of....
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5 posted 2001-08-02 02:57 PM



Strong emotions indeed....

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6 posted 2001-08-02 03:07 PM


I remember this well my friend. . . and it still stirs emotions. . .

well done. . .

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7 posted 2001-08-02 03:15 PM


Kaile~
Very poignantly done.
~*Marge*~

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8 posted 2001-08-02 03:17 PM


Abortion is a terrible thing
that should never happen.
Which then again is my personal
opinion.
This is really well written.
And on a subject that I have
strong feelings about.
Good job.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

Voiceless
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9 posted 2001-08-02 03:17 PM


Abortion is a terrible thing
that should never happen.
Which then again is my personal
opinion.
This is really well written.
And on a subject that I have
strong feelings about.
Good job.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

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10 posted 2001-08-02 05:00 PM


This is a critical issue in our world and you brought it right to the razor edge of death. Which is what abortion is, the death of the child. I judge not, nor would I take someones rights from them. But call it like it is. And educate. Very brave and calling piece.
Sincerely,
Regina

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11 posted 2001-08-02 06:44 PM


Courageous and outsatnding expression of what we sometimes deny,LIFE.  
JamesMichael
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12 posted 2001-08-02 06:52 PM


I think this is very well written...James
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13 posted 2001-08-02 06:57 PM


This is an excellent poem written on a touchy subject. Abortion is wrong.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

kaile
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14 posted 2001-08-02 11:29 PM


i lack the words to express my joy and gratitude

thank you all for reading and responding..you have made my day

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15 posted 2001-08-03 01:34 PM


Achingly sad.

ShannonM

Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 2001-08-03 07:14 PM


Faterider,
I agree with Balladeer, you write very well.

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17 posted 2001-08-03 08:05 PM


I don't often respond for I cannot contribute but I read almost every poem.  This is one of the best and most profound.  Thank you.

Cindi

kaile
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18 posted 2001-08-03 11:15 PM


ShannonM, indeed.
i hope that this poem will let people pause for reflection and hence not take abortion lightly...

Seymour, thank you for your compliment  

Cperazzi, i really appreciate the time you took to respond to my poem. I originally wanted to email you but it seems that your email address is not listed.

i just wanted to say that i hope you will share your works with us more often. perhaps you do not write often but there are previous works that you will like to share. please don't feel shy..jump on the bandwagon and have fun...

i do hope you get to read this...am off to read the only poem you have in passions  

[This message has been edited by faterider (edited 08-03-2001).]

Honeybee
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19 posted 2001-08-05 12:51 PM



*Bump*

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