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Forgetting To Pull Weeds
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Forgetting To Pull Weeds |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
No one planted The seed… Not you… Not me… Blown into the Garden of our love By winds of change Fed by separate ways Silence… Creeping like a Slow growing vine Entangles our lives, Strangling care, Shading out New growth. Silence… Turning passion’s flowers Into a neglected patch Of weeds We both failed to tend [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 08-02-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, this is so profoundly sorrowful, you use an excellet metaphor to show the wilting of love. I'm impressed with this, and do hope that it does not echo your life  Melissa~ |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
I believe I shall have new regard for the next time I see seeds scattered by the winds.... well done Sir! |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
This is so powerful! I love the form Cindi |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Now I have to go into my back yard and pull some...James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ I am very moved by this piece. Seeds of silence don't propagate productively. Very, very poignantly portrayed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
I feel this one....very expressive write Ron...you portrayed this situation well. ~Krista  "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
I stand and applaud  a great metaphor of poetic wonder! Bravo! Love and peace ((~.~)) |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Cpat..how a wonderful way of putting that, and so true..gentle smile |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Cpat--The garden is a perfect example of how both love and flower need constant care. Really enjoyed your poem! |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Excellent write Cpat weeds are a menace to any garden. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
This is one of my favorites from you. Awesome metaphors, Ron, and as always, very visual and mentally stimulating. Great work. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
fantastic analogy of what happens when members of a relationship don't stay alert this is so vivid and powerful and such a definite picture of how my actual garden grows that I can so relate to it and the 'garden' I used to have |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
So much truth, so well written. I like this one a lot. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
Silence creeping like a Slow growing vine Entangles our lives Strangling care Shading out New growth Silence Turning passion's flowers Into a neglected patch Of weeds We both Failed to tend ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ron, Beautiful... So real Silence caused from so many things in life Good Job!!!!!! Thank You |
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