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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-08-02 10:26 AM

Precipice edged
danglings
holding only
at tips of meaning

threatening to fall
with each crumbling
break of hold

as I
read again
and then
once again
the words

free fall
smashing reality
seems indeed
a better end

than bloody grasp
failing
after all

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2001-08-02 10:35 AM

Wow. This is the kind of writing I like from you, the edgy kind....leaving one a bit breathless....

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

2 posted 2001-08-02 10:51 AM

yes, and sometimes the fall is painful, but the hanging on is torture. Good work on this one!

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2001-08-02 06:37 PM

Oh yes, this is powerful stuff. Hanging on can hurt, hm?
Sandra

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-08-02 06:53 PM

You do, of course, have a parachute ... your mighty pen

shadow974
Senior Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 636
Michigan

5 posted 2001-08-02 07:01 PM

Very well written, I've been there many times.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

6 posted 2001-08-02 08:09 PM

It seems kind of like the choice between taking a bandaid off quickly, with one deliberate motion, feeling all the pain compressed into a few seconds...or removing it slowly, carefully, the pain is not so acute but it's duration is just as distateful. Either way the bandaids got to come off eventually. Have I mentioned that I enjoy your writing a lot?

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

7 posted 2001-08-04 02:45 PM

Another powerful thought-provoker. You have a strong knack for potent imagery.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

8 posted 2001-08-04 04:21 PM

Ron,
This is cool : )
Bravo

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

9 posted 2001-08-04 05:26 PM

These poems of late are extremely POWERFUL, Ron, and they seem to be on one particular theme...I hope that if it's been experience that has made them easy to so acutely pen, that it's from a looooooonnnnnnnnng past event that you're borrowing emotions from in order to grab us by the throat or the wrist or the ribs.

Truly that is what I hope!

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