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Tiersdin
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0 posted 2001-08-13 12:36 PM


...for letting go

Applied for credit
but didn't get it
it seems the past
tends to last
tried to erase it
but still I taste it
like bitter bile
lingering a while
was told it's cool
but I'm no fool
It's plain to see
you can't believe
I'm not the same~
I've quit the game
for only a jerk
enjoys getting hurt
heart to heart
here's to a new start
let egos begone
as we both move on
innuendos aside
along with the pride
I just want us to be
the you & the me
separately...

~Tier
8/01


© Copyright 2001 R.T. Webster-Mosby - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 2001-08-13 12:42 PM


How about credit for the poetic honesty of this?  I think it's more than due.  
Tiersdin
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2 posted 2001-08-13 01:00 AM


*chuckles* Thank you, Duncan...

~Tier

Sven
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3 posted 2001-08-13 07:22 PM


here's your card my friend. . . with a unlimited line. . .  

great job on this one. . .nice flow and wonderful thoughts. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

snowpants
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4 posted 2001-08-14 12:31 PM


I love the straightforwardness of this, Tier...nicely written!

sp  

can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

Sunshine
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5 posted 2001-08-14 04:32 PM



With a credit line like this, both sides end up winning...

well done, I can see this won't bankrupt anyone for its honesty...

Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2001-08-14 04:46 PM


No one would ever call you a fool... and as for credit..you deserve a great deal for writing like this..and for the honesty it shows...

very nice piece my friend... very nice indeed

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