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snowpants
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0 posted 2001-08-01 08:33 PM


I’ve been warmed by a misplaced sun--
train me until I beam with expertise...
I’ve been misguided by a wayward moon--
stop me from driving through the rain...
migrant thoughts have intruded on my solitude--
lure them out with the scent of freedom...

the potential validity of these dreams,
in addition to symmetry coming into play,
incorporates the unimaginable concept of reality...
walking with the cadence of your eyes’ breeze
stops me from spending my light on futile pursuits...

I’m wrapped in peace and flow in a tempo stream...
somebody please drop me off at my baby’s door...
you did say that the next stop is heaven, didn’t you?
pretending we’re together is as sensible
as planting wildflowers...
I missed you long before our fingers untied...

there’s a break in the clouds
as I head further north on this highway...
but, such scattered thoughts as these
are brought into conjunction
with remembering the spreading of that smile across your face...

-kh



it was love that first drew me,
it is love that will keep me here...
now I see love burning brightly
when everything else is unclear...

© Copyright 2001 snowpants - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2001-08-01 10:13 PM


Ok sweetie ... I have to admit while I was driving south and you were driving north once again I was tempted to turn around and change this pattern that we seem caught in.
So next time dont be surprised if I refuse to untie my fingers from yours.

This is a very lovely poem and you know it means the world to me, and of course your gift of vision and imagery mix perfectly with the emotions.  

I love you.

I have found in you ... a reflection of me ...
and a path to the peace I have sought.

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15
Posts 737
Canada
2 posted 2001-08-01 10:45 PM


Nicely done...you use such abstract thoughts that come together. (in my view anyways) And the words you use...I don't even know what they mean, but they're great! And your imagery is wonderful. I like your s/n...

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-08-02 12:33 PM


the potential validity of these dreams,
in addition to symmetry coming into play,
incorporates the unimaginable concept of reality...
walking with the cadence of your eyes’ breeze
stops me from spending my light on futile pursuits...


====================================
pretending we’re together is as sensible
as planting wildflowers...
I missed you long before our fingers untied
================================

Well girlie...when youre inspired... whew!!
this is a very very cool write SP...
in vocabulary...imagery...and emote...
this is one of my faves of yours...
write on..ride on
excellent poetry poetess Kooler-Knickers  
me

slow burn ...
light a candle for our love
So that we will always be
one on one in lovely love

JLR
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since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-08-02 02:35 AM


I missed you long before our fingers untied...

I know this stretch of highway well!  Appreciated this much!

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
5 posted 2001-08-02 09:18 AM


kris,
beautiful poem hon. the imagery
in this is excellent..i really
"felt" this one. congrats sweetie
im very happy for you!!

loves ya
aims ~~~~~
aka koolaid kid lol

p.s i'll e-ya soon

"but i see your true colors,
shining through...
i see your true colors
and that's why i love you"
~phil collins~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2001-08-02 10:00 AM


Snowpants,
Well you blew up a snow storm with this one.
Enjoyed the read nicely done.

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
7 posted 2001-08-04 12:08 PM


Snowpants--The love in this is so wonderful to read, because you have written with your heart and some talent too.  Much enjoyed!
snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061
KS
8 posted 2001-08-05 02:30 PM


(sorry for taking so LONG to thank you all... )

M:  yes, and an ugly pattern it is...same temptation here, too, baby...I also won't put up much of a fight either... ...thanks, sweets, for the compliments...your opinion of my work means so much to me...

Leah:  thank you...I am glad it made sense to you!    

J:  oh yeah...inspired, indeed...oh, what a muse can do!  thanks, girlie...I'm happy you liked this...a little more on a personal level, but, I just couldn't help it...

JLR:  then I'm sure you know how not fun it is, huh?  thank you...glad you appreciated it!    

Aims:  hey...thanks so much, girlie...nice to see ya!  ttys!  -e  ~~~~~~

Sy:  a snow storm is cool... ...but thank you so much for your compliment!  glad you enjoyed!    

Martie:  thanks so much for your reply...this one was definitely from the heart...glad you could stop by!    

sp  


it was love that first drew me,
it is love that will keep me here...
now I see love burning brightly
when everything else is unclear...

[This message has been edited by snowpants (edited 08-05-2001).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
9 posted 2001-08-10 12:25 PM



snowpants-
   The love you've penned here makes my
   heart smile for you.
   Very beautiful heartfelt write.

   hugs,
   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
10 posted 2001-08-12 11:30 PM


As always, your work inspires me!

*hugs & smiles*

~Tier

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