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Honeybee
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0 posted 2001-08-01 04:27 PM




Strings Cut



Selfish strings attached to my heart
you exploit and tug at each sacred part
convincing me that I need approval to claim my worth
forced to become your breath of re-birth,
I am the ear of reason absorbing insecurity
and in return it finds a nesting place to fester inside of me
time and time again, I'm ever so eager to satisfy
and you drink of my spirit, then leave me to cry
I'm shrouded by confusion in this disease to please
I reach for a guiding hand as I drown in lonely seas
friendships made on fairweather, bruises my heart abused
now I find strength within, dulling the aftertaste of being used



By Melissa P. Monette


© Copyright 2001 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-08-01 06:29 PM


I'm shrouded by confusion in this disease to please
I reach for a guiding hand as I drown in lonely seas
friendships made on fairweather, bruises my heart abused
now I find strength within, dulling the aftertaste of being used

this just about says it all.... really liked the poem... nicely done!

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2 posted 2001-08-02 06:35 PM


Melissa, this is perfect, the feeling comes through loudly. Sorry if you are going through a bad time. You have only to look at any of my poems from last year to see that I totally understand.
Take care.
Sandra

Honeybee
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3 posted 2001-08-02 07:06 PM


Ron and Sandra~

Thank you for your replies and for understanding my feelings.  

I wrote this poem a few days ago because I finally had to get these emotions out.  Although I have some very close friends whom I trust completely and whom I would do anything for, I also have come to realize that I have friends who are not truly my real friends, who only care about me when they can get something in return~

Melissa~

Mark Bohannan
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4 posted 2001-08-02 07:38 PM


It is never easy to accept that there are those that will turn on the friendships formed at the drop of a hat but then come back when it is they who need you.  Hold your head up and smile knowing that you are much better than they and that one day you will have the chance to show them the "REAL" meaning of friendship.  Well written and voiced.
shadow974
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5 posted 2001-08-02 07:43 PM


Nicely written and full of feeling.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

JLR
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6 posted 2001-08-02 08:00 PM


I am the ear of reason absorbing insecurity

There are so many great lines in this...it had to add up to a poem of great measure!

Honeybee
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7 posted 2001-08-02 08:14 PM



Mark, Shadow and JLR- Thank you for your support.  After penning this poem, it makes me cherish my true friends even more.  I do feel stronger now  

Melissa~

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8 posted 2001-08-02 09:30 PM


you've always had this strength inside of you my friend. . . it's good to see it come out. . .

well done and well written. . .  

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9 posted 2001-08-03 03:16 AM


melissa,

your recent poems always stir up emotions plenty...this is no exception...

i applaud you as a writer who dares to cut to the core of herself and write herself in inanimate sentences...

cpalmer
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10 posted 2001-08-03 07:29 AM


This touches my heart melissa...Im so glad to see the hope come out...take care
Cindi

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