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jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13
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0 posted 2001-07-31 04:18 PM




My heart stopped caring.
One day this summer
it must have been,
I don't guess I quite understand it
myself, but I know something
is definitely wrong
because I don't feed the birds
anymore.
I have the seeds that the squirrels
won't steal in a jar
that sits in the cabinet.
I have sugar
to mix one part to four
but the feeders swing empty
the hummers long gone
my heart no longer wings
with them in flight.
I have lost the
need to write
the despair lightens not
no matter the position of
the sun.
My word well no longer overfills
seeking relief;
it stands stagnant.
Procrastination tells me that
complacency is not so bad.
Indecision has made my grief and anger  
content to place down my pen
on an empty page.
I press my forehead to the
glass and gaze
at my blank birdless
world with
uncaring eyes
but I can't picture me
in it
and I wonder if
that's why
I don't feed the birds anymore.


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Cpat Hair
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Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

1 posted 2001-07-31 04:22 PM


I press my forehead to the
glass and gaze
at my blank birdless
world with
uncaring eyes
but I can't picture me
in it
and I wonder if
that's why
I don't feed the birds anymore.


How do we get tto the place we don't picture ourselves in the world we once knew and loved? I know many ways to get there...but I hope you find your way back... which is harder to do... I personally... hope you find it soon....

strong ending..and a strong poem...

JLR
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since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785

2 posted 2001-07-31 05:03 PM


I am in absolute awe of the emotion, or lack of it...you've communicated with this.  I really loved this poem.  And I bet the birds miss you.
RMW
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since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424

3 posted 2001-07-31 05:36 PM


Jellybeans ..... this is so good, so haunting, so inviting of an answer. The birds, with the suggestion of flight, made me remember a time when it was possible to sit up, late into the night, and outlast a sad or tiresome day by experiencing a television sign-off. Do you remember? See http://www.wpafb.af.mil/museum/history/prewwii/jgm.htm  

Thank you for sharing. Bob

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
4 posted 2001-07-31 05:42 PM


Jellybeans,
If I were a bird I'd fly by and give you a big kiss. Good write.

VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
5 posted 2001-07-31 05:47 PM


an extremely powerful and poignant write of which I so fully understand

I'm very, very slowly starting to crawl out of this symptom or stage, then for awhile I stop again.  

Let me ditto everyone here, too.  Their responses are so 'right on!'

Constance
Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393
Ohio
6 posted 2001-07-31 05:47 PM


The sense of desolation is perfectly captured jellybeans. Beautifully written. Come away from that window now, won't you please? There are birds hungry for your attention, and fellow poets hungry for your words.
1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace
7 posted 2001-08-01 06:15 AM


JB...ever word you write is like tears from heaven...helen
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
8 posted 2001-08-01 06:36 AM


This poem has a wonderful sweet flow...James
rwood
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since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793
Tennessee
9 posted 2001-08-01 07:16 AM


Exquisite poem! You turned the mundane into something delicate and longing. I hope you find your way back outside. Your words still feed us!  
Sincerely,
Regina

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298

10 posted 2001-08-01 04:03 PM


thank you all, you are all so considerate and kind and caring...sigh.....thank you...

and poets note...yes this was posted under a different author name, but it is me just the same.....thank you for watching out for poetic integrity...

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