Stars like wind - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #15

Stars like wind

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2001-07-31 03:49 PM

The stars are singing silently
to the future of human needs
the anger we opress
that falls on us as we condemn
lives in the silent wind
that are lost to our ears
lives in the silent shore
that we fail and ignore.
The stars are crying desperatly
for the rage in you and me
that makes us ignorant
of the peace we have within
lives in the silent wind
that want us to begin
lives on the silent shore
we no longer can ignore.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2001-07-31 04:33 PM

dear poet of the wind...I do so love the way your poetic mind works

wisdom on the wind ... beautiful MG

slow burn ...
light a candle for our love
So that we will always be
one on one in lovely love

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-07-31 05:36 PM

this has the sense of the beginning of a song

maybe all the words are there, but perhaps a chorus repeated with divisions in places to make more than one verse and a tag

enjoy the feel of this

BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

3 posted 2001-07-31 06:13 PM

Much wisdom in your poem.

Deb

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

4 posted 2001-07-31 06:30 PM

Michael~

A wise outpouring of contemplation and ache. The repetition of those few key phrases hit the reader effectively

Melissa~

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.