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Corinne
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0 posted 2001-07-31 12:11 PM



Interval

Seven-thirty:
twilight blushes trees
into brandy - sans sifters,
golden air begs to be drunk,
taken in deep sighs –
from eye
to mind,
in s l o w i n g cadence,
exhalation
of the foul
to sip upon the sweet.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2001 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
JLR
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1 posted 2001-07-31 12:17 PM


I've read this four times and each time...I sighed in understanding.  Bravo!
azblond
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2 posted 2001-07-31 12:21 PM


This is one you read again and again, and the drink is ever sweet each time.

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Logan
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3 posted 2001-07-31 12:44 PM


Ahh, Cor, it sounds like twilight on the edge of the desert...very gentle smile
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4 posted 2001-07-31 07:59 AM


Ah yes no more intoxicating drink is there...

very nicely done...

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5 posted 2001-07-31 06:04 PM


*sigh* Geesh..thats what I was doing all the way through this one. It has a calming effect from beginning to end. Hope all is well, Cor! Miss ya! Are you still on a messenger program?
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6 posted 2001-07-31 06:42 PM


ahhh. . . indeed like the sips that you speak of. . .

well done. . .

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7 posted 2001-08-07 11:33 AM


Well, not sure I understand the meaning behind the poem although it has interesting flow... What might golden air bags be?  

Parker

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8 posted 2001-08-07 11:40 AM


well, I'm getting thirsty!~ I just read a poem by Doreen about wine and chess, maybe I'll get something at the liquor store! Who me? Yeah me!

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kay

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9 posted 2001-08-07 11:53 PM


This was beautiful...Makes me sigh with happiness.
Cindi

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Corinne
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10 posted 2001-08-08 03:59 PM


Thank you, everyone, for commenting.

Parker, that's golden air "BEGS,"
you know, like begging???

Sheesh!

Cor

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11 posted 2001-08-09 08:50 AM



Sounds like a bad day was had, but refuge found in the coming home...

enjoyed this one Corinne!

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12 posted 2001-08-09 09:20 AM


Corinne,
You went deep for this one. Very good, enjoyed

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13 posted 2001-08-09 11:37 AM


You have a way of actually breathing in a visage... Beautiful, Corinne..
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14 posted 2001-08-09 02:01 PM


Corinne~

'twilight blushes trees
into brandy'


How refreshingly unique~
~*Marge*~

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15 posted 2001-08-09 02:08 PM


Martie, I don't whether to look on this as a the gentle kiss of alcohol or that slow sinking feeling into the bottom of a glass. I have experienced both far too often, which you intend this is a beautifully written poem.  

shadows flicker sweet end tame
dancing like crazy mourners" magazine


Corinne
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16 posted 2001-08-09 04:08 PM


Thank you, Sunshine, yep you got it!

Thanks also, Sey, Nan, Marge and CitizenX.

Yes, its about a bad, stressful day, coming home and suddenly noticing the beauty in the outside world, how just watching trees before sunset can relax both body and mind, if we just take the time to appreciate them.

Cor

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17 posted 2001-08-09 05:18 PM


Hey... well you know that trick of the eye.. when you read something over and over and you see something else. Its like dyslexic vision or something.  

Like when I see Corinne... it comes out Irish.. testy Irish at times...  

Parker

citizenx
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18 posted 2001-08-09 05:27 PM


"exhalation
of the foul
to sip upon the sweet".

Yes I see now, this is the trouble with me not giving poems the time they fully deserve. I shall endevour to read slower in future.

shadows flicker sweet end tame
dancing like crazy mourners" magazine


Constance
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19 posted 2001-08-09 06:05 PM


Corinne, very little more to be said here except brava! beautifully put for sure!
shadow974
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20 posted 2001-08-09 10:21 PM


Beautifully written, it plays with the imagination then takes a fresh breath.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

shadow974
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21 posted 2001-08-09 10:21 PM


Beautifully written, it plays with the imagenation then takes a fresh breath.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

Corinne
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22 posted 2001-08-10 12:00 PM


Aye, Park - Sorry to be so fiery, Lad!

Thank you for the second read, Citizenx!

Thank you also, Constance and Shadow!

Corinne

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