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Constance
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since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

0 posted 2001-07-30 02:27 PM

The Knight Charmer
Here is the tale of the charmer.
His house was never his home.
His words were his mace and his armor,
And he fought all his battles alone.

He lived the battle and fought the war.
He begged no quarter and granted none.
Championed and bedded both lady and whore,
But pledged his heart to no one.

On and on, he fought and won,
Till each clash had no end or beginning.
No longer sure when the fight had begun,
And numb to the reason for winning.

He found no rest- no peaceful place,
But wandered, bloody and broken.
Unbidden tears touched his face,
As, in despair, his prayer was spoken.

"Oh God, if You can hear my voice,
I humbly lower my shield."
"I trust in You to make the choice,
For I can not". "I yield".

"I need two things to carry on."
"I shall trust You to guide me."
"A body of work to stand upon,
And one love to stand beside me."

"Help me channel my desire."
"Keep me focused, keep me strong."
"If I must live outside the fire,
Then I have lived too long."

"Amen"

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

1 posted 2001-07-30 02:38 PM

A solid write, Constance. When the reasons are forgotten, it's time for an honest reassessment... Strong metaphors, too, and an important message, as well.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2001-07-30 02:52 PM

I agree with Mark.. a solid write with good language and nice images..

ShannonM
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 104
Drifitng

3 posted 2001-07-30 05:39 PM

You have a wonderful style of writing and tell a very good story. Nice details and use of metaphor.

ShannonM

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-07-30 05:48 PM

Beautiful prayer and tale, Constance.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-07-30 06:50 PM

a superb tale well told. . . I could see it in my mind. . .

and I'm glad that it's time for you to share your work. . . welcome!!!

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Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

6 posted 2001-07-30 07:32 PM

You know, I've always wondered where all the really nice people gathered. Now I know--right here at Passions. I'm so glad I found my way here. Thank you so much for your comments and good will. I am inspired to keep writing and to improve my work. Thanks again!

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

7 posted 2001-07-30 09:43 PM

Hey do you know me? I felt these words.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

8 posted 2001-07-31 10:00 AM

RSWELLS-Glad you could identify. btw,actually I did live in the Texas. Big state though--you must get around!

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