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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2001-07-30 01:42 PM


people kept saying,
"tell him how you feel, tell him."

so i did, and after i told him,
i felt no change.....

but what had i expected,
even a little change....

but no, i got nothing from him,
no, i did get sumthing...

i got a solid brick wall,
that i just couldn't get through.....

i had finally told him my true feelings,
and it  didn't even phase him...

all i got was the deadness...
the nothingness when he can't be spoken to..

death is certain, life is not
have u ever needed somebody so bad, u cry when u arent around them, and still miss them when u r around them?

© Copyright 2001 Staci Weidner - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-07-30 01:45 PM


intense image in the last stanza..with a good presentation in the ones before...

sad story... and one that hurts to feel... but you told it well..


Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
2 posted 2001-07-30 01:50 PM


thank u. this came 2 me in my sleep last night....he it turned out 2 be a nightmare...

death is certain, life is not
have u ever needed somebody so bad, u cry when u arent around them, and still miss them when u r around them?

Punk Angel
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since 2001-07-25
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3 posted 2001-07-30 01:55 PM


wow, who was this one about? lol

We love what is lost, but does what we lost love us back??    
~*Krista*~

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2001-07-31 02:25 PM


Just remember this kiddo, it's better off to find out now than waste time on what is not meant to be.  Hugs, and you always know where I am at.  

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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