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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2001-07-30 10:35 AM


You came to me in dreams again
although I bade you stay away
no care for how the dream would hurt
firmly ensconced, you seem to stay.

You came to me with silky voice
and arms to hold me tight and strong
to bring back thoughts of loving you
the ones that really were not gone.

You cold absconded with my heart
and left it torn in two with lies
I told myself twas over now
yet still you sneak into my nights

Begone, oh man so unconcerned
with thoughtless way you banished me
I do not wish to see your face
after the way you let me bleed.

I'll save my dreams for better things
if all of it's the same to you
Perhaps I'll dream of golden knights
not vaporous hopes or hardened fools.

This one last time, final request
do go away and don't come back
I'm over you, so what's the point?
To torture me upon the rack?

No more, my once so special love
I want no more reminders here
Give me some peace, I must demand
I'm quickly running out of tears..



© Copyright 2001 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-07-30 10:39 AM


ah.. nicely penned... I enjoyed!!

Voiceless
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Under the stars upon the wind
2 posted 2001-07-30 11:24 AM


The flow is so great
and the words so painful.
If it helps any the poem
was beautifully written.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2001-07-30 11:29 AM


Cat,
It was your dream, nice write enjoyed.

MARK V SHELDON
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In a corporeal internship...
4 posted 2001-07-30 02:05 PM


Powerful...  "unresolved resolution".  

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

athena4
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5 posted 2001-07-30 04:43 PM


Sandra,
    So full of angst and fragile emotions...Unfortunately, I can relate.
     Love, Elise

Lone Wolf
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6 posted 2001-07-30 06:03 PM


Emotionally powerful write, Sandra.  Well done.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Sven
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7 posted 2001-07-30 06:48 PM


to throw out the dreams that we don't want. . . it can be done. . .

powerfully done my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
8 posted 2001-07-30 07:21 PM


Cadence kissed and inpactful a definite.  Well written and expressed from beginning to end.  The challenges of life are enough without having to re-trace the footsteps we have already left.  
cpalmer
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9 posted 2001-07-30 07:41 PM


I liked this very much!
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

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Deep in the heart
10 posted 2001-07-30 07:43 PM


Such a powerfully stated demand and glimpse of vulnerability!  I loved it!
Honeybee
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11 posted 2001-07-30 08:10 PM


"I want no reminders here
give me some peace, I must demand
I'm quickly running out of tears"
==================================

Wow! Sandra, this is powerfully penned, sadly, I relate~

Melissa~

MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
12 posted 2001-07-30 11:39 PM




I'll save my dreams for better things
if all of it's the same to you
Perhaps I'll dream of golden knights
not vaporous hopes or hardened fools.

=============

Dream of a golden knight
you would have him one day
as he would come
your way....

Beautiful and very well done Sandra........it touched me. I like the one of resolution you have here....

Thank you
**************************


T

Ariana
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13 posted 2001-07-31 04:53 PM


Sandra

Get him out of your system girl - nicely penned.  Now, get on your horse and saddle and look for your Knight in shining armour!
Extremely emotional writing!

BloomingRose
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14 posted 2001-07-31 06:04 PM


I can relate to this repeated haunt. Hope your dreams soon change to better days.
  


Hugs,
Deb  

JamesMichael
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15 posted 2001-07-31 06:42 PM


Interesting the way you are holding on and trying to let go...in time the answers come and life goes on as new experiences fill our lives...James
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