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Constance
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0 posted 2001-07-30 02:25 AM



Unchained
How can you claim to be an immortal,
When Zeus and his children are dust?
How dare you enthrone yourself high on Olympus,
Dictating who might and who must!

You are a mortal, and bound to this earth,
Just as the rest of us are.
Constellations are named for the mighty Orion,
While you haven't even a star.

I cannot abide that you think me beneath you,
When the blood in my veins flows as red.
I am your bride sir, but never your servant!
I tell you, the old gods are dead.

I beg you leave to legend the throne,
Impotent Zeus occupies,
For when you no longer claim kin to the titan,
You shall be a god in my eyes.

[This message has been edited by Constance (edited 08-01-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Constance M. Lessard - All Rights Reserved
Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-07-30 07:24 AM


I like this, maybe a bit wordy, I would love to come back and give you a detailed opinion but sometimes people don't really want that    It's good to read something someone has obviously put some thought into!

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kathleen


RSWells
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2 posted 2001-07-30 07:56 AM


Obviously a foolish endeavor to attempt to contain such a free spirit with unbridled passion. Enjoyed.

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

Nan
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3 posted 2001-07-30 08:33 AM


I like your philosophies... and your analogies... and your verbiage...

He who has it and doesn't flaunt it is indeed deserving of accolades...

I'll be reading more of your work, Constance..

VAS
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4 posted 2001-07-30 11:07 AM


this tickled me so as I read it and I can whole-heartedly agree with R.S.Wells and Nan! Enjoyable!

My thoughts, we are to be help-mates that compliment each other with our strengths, compensating for weaknesses, making an extremely powerful duo.

I learned that too late.

Constance
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5 posted 2001-07-30 11:32 AM


Irish Rose-yes, I know my stuff sometimes gets wordy and my style is not specific either. I've tried to contain it, but sometimes I think I lived once in a time when people actually spoke this way. Sometimes that "former person" seems to come out and grab my pen. Thanks for the observation.

RSWELLS-yes indeed, sometimes my muse is a runaway steed and all I can do is hang on for dear life and go where it takes me.Yeehah! Smiles to you.

Nan-thanks again for your kind words. You sound like a kindred spirit.Watch for something posted which you inspired.

VAS-glad you enjoyed. I understand your thoughts--but hey, it's NEVER too late for tomorrow!Thanks.

Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2001-07-30 11:59 AM


yes... nicely penned...and enjoyable to read... captured nicely.

I enjoyed

Lady In White
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7 posted 2001-07-30 12:22 PM



Write as you will...as long as I can read it, I shall enjoy it...

well done Lady Constance!

MARK V SHELDON
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8 posted 2001-07-30 01:49 PM


Adamant and intelligent.  Two very appealing qualities when found together.

-MVS

"When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said."
--Del Casher

MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
9 posted 2001-07-30 02:49 PM




Wow.....I found this mortal writing quite powerful.
I really enjoyed it.....

Thank you
*******************

Martie
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10 posted 2001-07-31 01:17 AM


Constance--Powerful and appealing, both said above, and I repeat.  You are a good writer, I think. (PS  thank you also for your lovely replies)
Rick
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11 posted 2001-08-01 08:21 AM


Constance, you sound bound by an overpowering presence, who is obsessed on having power and obedience. Your words hold much in the way of thought and expression. If this is your way of escape to the doorway of freedom, you are there in the mind and are finding more and more strength all the time to maybe walk through.

Good luck!!!!!

A very good read and write.

Rick

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