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staybellmined
Junior Member
since 2001-07-29
Posts 21
insanity, usa (killeen,tx)

0 posted 2001-07-29 09:20 PM



crashing into you
sublimial introduction
a stare
a look
reading signs
like a book
dancing to silence
drowning away
in a sea of air
a whisper
a touch
a secret
find a crutch
with a confusion contusion
trapped in my brain
bleeding
breeding
feeding
needing
cut it out with your hands
carve it and starve it
as I float
in the night
underneath
the moon light


© Copyright 2001 James - All Rights Reserved
ShannonM
Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 104
Drifitng
1 posted 2001-07-29 09:28 PM


I like the tempo here, and the subject matter.  The theme is not far from where I actually stand.  Good job.

ShannonM

azblond
Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637
The Steamy Desert
2 posted 2001-07-29 09:43 PM


Lovely write!

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2001-07-29 10:18 PM



Welcome to Passions! An interesting first write! Please, check your e-mail for a special greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




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