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Auguste
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0 posted 2001-07-29 03:06 PM


Just Nine

by Michael


On landscape timber garden
rests a man in tears,
gently brushing scarlet flowers
with fingertips.

As he sobs, he thinks back on her years.
Just nine of them, just nine
and now she’ll not see ten.

He remembers how her little hand
felt in his own
and how she giggled at his goofy faces,
how the doctors found cancer in the bone
and then found it in so many other places.

She said, “Don’t worry, Daddy, it’s okay.”
His days and nights were spent beside her bed.
He watched her little body wither ‘way
and cherished every word his daughter said.

His tears fall on the teddy bear she held.
He draws it to his chest in an embrace.
The doctors did their best, but then they failed,
how brave the look upon her tiny face.

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

© Copyright 2001 Michael Auguste - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2001-07-29 03:20 PM


Michael--This is so very sad! Well written, as always.
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2 posted 2001-07-29 03:37 PM


Michael, this is so sad... My boss is going through this right now with her daughter of 15 years. Cancer shouldn't touch ones so young.

thank you for this write.

Parker

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3 posted 2001-07-29 07:17 PM


Michael, as usual you write with such emotion. This is a wonderful peice. I love it.


Dee

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4 posted 2001-07-29 07:23 PM


And tears stream down my face
It just doesn't seem fair
Nine years is far too little
For you to have to share

But I am sure the time was sweet
No other love shall ever compete
And as an Angel in heaven above
Nine billion stars send out their love

Touching and far too painful to put into words.

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

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5 posted 2001-07-29 08:07 PM


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6 posted 2001-07-29 08:10 PM


*sobs* that is so sad. But you somehow managed to keep anger out of it while talking about such an experiance. aww.. *huggles* sweet read
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7 posted 2001-07-29 08:39 PM


Oh how sad this tale is.  Emotional write, Michael.  You paint it so well.

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by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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8 posted 2001-07-29 09:25 PM


Excellent writing Auguste...soft and tender...James
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9 posted 2001-07-29 11:49 PM


This is so sad and sweet.. has me crying..
Excellent Michael..

Magnolia

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10 posted 2001-07-30 03:46 PM



Such a wrenching read, Auguste...and how tenderly you left us in tears...

you slipped this in, and then slipped on out...

much like life will do...

Well done, Sir...

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11 posted 2001-07-31 02:48 PM


I'm looking towards November, when I will be celebrating my son's 9th birthday.....I can't even imagine not having him here with me.....Michael, this goes so deep, and touches so completely......thank you for this.....(((HUGS))) to you, SEA
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12 posted 2001-07-31 03:08 PM


What a touchingly beautiful bittersweet tale, well written Michael.

Reel beauty is only fin deep!

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