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Out There (Song Of The Streets)
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Out There (Song Of The Streets) |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio 
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OK, here's my first. This is very difficult for me, but I suppose everyone feels very "exposed" at first. Out There (Song Of The Streets) Walking in the winter wind, cold, clear-eyed, I see things that pierce my brittle breast. An aged woman, shoes shuffling, holding her hope close about her like a warm coat. Strangers, stashing secret dreams down deep in private pockets. Take care, silent ones, not to give them out in charitable change. Fearful faces, etched in alleyways. Endangered subway species, riding rolling ghettos. Children, chasing candy-wrapper happiness into traffic. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome and don't be afraid. Your writing is specific and descriptive and yes, I can tell you've been writing for many years. Here, you will receive feedback and to a poet? That's like bread and butter! Looking so forward to reading more from you. " I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis" Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 07-28-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Constance~ Welcome to Passions ! You sure picked a great place to hang your first 'hat' !  'It's time', indeed ! You're gonna like it here ! We're going to enjoy having you in this circle of friends and poets ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
WONDERFULY-crafted imagery!! A hearty welcome to you, Constance. I especially liked the last stanza and then the one before that and then again, the one before that one, as well. Very vividy visual and phrased with a sense of uniqueness. Keen observations on scenery that is hard to take in, but this provokes thought and inspires a desire for change... Very well done. I look forward to reading more from you. -MVS "When you tell the Truth, you never have to remember what you just said." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! I remember so very well the first time I hit that "send" button! But now you are an OFFICIAL member and we want you to make yourself at home! Please check your e-mail for a special greeting! Karilea |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
Thanks to you all! I've been waiting to exhale, but now I know I can breathe again. I've read many of the poems here and I feel honored to be included. Thanks again. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Constance--Observation and compassion light this poem. Welcome to Passions...I look forward to reading more of your poetry! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Welcome to Poetry Land Constance so nice to meet you... your imagery in this is well done and you use unique phrases to create them. a wonderful poetic entrance. jm slow burn ... |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Well you have me hooked, now my only question is...when do we get to read more??!! I enjoyed this very much, I felt as though I was watching each scene unfold (enough so that I wanted to run and tell the children to be careful!) Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is exceptional..!! I surely hope you make yourself comfy in our Passionate Place...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Constance, You have a sharp needle and sew a beautiful cloth. Enjoyed your post and welcome aboard. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Welcome... I enjoyed your post... fine images and a nice bit of word play.. good to have you with us!! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Welcome!!! I would especially like to echo Janet Marie, but I could echo them all without any qualms. That last stanza was vivid and frightening! It made me think again of how I want to write one about when I was little and now, it seems, that I just was a body following my eyes around, but haven't quite come up with how to convey that without just stating it. You do very well at conveying your message without having to state what you mean, it's done with 'action'! Look forward to reading more! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Constance- Wow! This is wonderful!  Penned with a tender and caring heart.. Welcome to Passions!! You'll love this 'circle of friends' hugs, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
Brrrrrr! Well done! Welcome aboard, Constance. Glad you've come. \\ |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Constance No need to have fear in this place...we are all friendly! You'll like it here! I look forward to reading more of your stuff, I can tell you have been writing for a while...glad you are willing to share with us your 'circle of friends' Take care Cindi God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
This is an exseptionally good poem. Great job. Throw your heart out in front of you |
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