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Corinne
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0 posted 2001-07-27 07:33 PM


Windsurfing

I cannot bear witness
to your vanishing,
this vestige,
a faceless touch,
once solid.

Soon,
no amount of unearthing
will verify your existence.
With each plane of exodus,
you drift,
from weight of water
to vapor.

This decision
winnowed in
on prevailing winds,
realized
with a finality
one spring day,
with a finger’s snap,
pictures of simplicity
pierced through intricacies,
a calling higher
than ground could hold.

A part of the earth,
but apart from it,
gathering love
about you,
windsurfing
on a williwaw,
to a locale
known
only
to God.

© 2001 Corinne Bailey

[This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 07-27-2001).]

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Denise
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1 posted 2001-07-27 07:41 PM


Very touching, Corinne. Creatively expressed. Well done.
Corinne
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2 posted 2001-07-27 08:47 PM


Thank you, Denise!

Corinne

mirror man
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3 posted 2001-07-27 10:04 PM


I like this.  Real feelings.  Something I can't quite pin down.  Very good.  
shadow974
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4 posted 2001-07-27 10:12 PM


Nicely none. It was very descriptive and It's something I would love to try.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

Irish Rose
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5 posted 2001-07-27 11:08 PM


good strong descriptive phrasing, Corinne, a pleasure to read.

" I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be" George William Curtis"

Kathleen


Logan
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6 posted 2001-07-27 11:24 PM


Yes, you did it very well indeed, Cor, hon..very well...very gentle smile
Corinne
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7 posted 2001-07-28 12:54 PM


Thank you, Mirror Man, Shadow, Irish Rose and Logan.

A subject near and dear...

Cor

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8 posted 2001-07-28 03:20 AM


Corinne~

'A part of the earth,
but apart from it,
gathering love
about you,
windsurfing
on a williwaw,
to a locale
known
only
to God.'


You write of life (or the loss of it?) with piercing vividity~
Exceptionally well done, poetess.
~*Marge*~

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Corinne
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9 posted 2001-07-28 10:39 AM


Thank you, sweet lady.

Cor

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10 posted 2001-07-28 10:45 AM


this is excellent Corinne. . . showing the loss of life here. . . but also the fact that in the loss of life, there is the re-birth of the spirit. . . windsurfing the astral winds to find Eden. . .

as always, you use the most wonderful and heartfelt images in your work. . .this is no exception. . .  

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Corinne
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11 posted 2001-07-29 01:07 PM


Thank you very much, Sven, as always, your comments are tender and thoughtful.

Corinne

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