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Lady In White
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0 posted 2001-07-27 03:59 PM



strange

that
in a solemn rite
one can tie
one’s hands so
tight

as I would loose
the bonds
that bind
to take you back
into time

when love was
good and
fresh, sincere ~
our way was
paved, our
efforts, clear

but you have
grown, distantly
and have
become,
insistently,
one
that I don’t know
now
and in all of this
somehow

the commit we
made is
strangling us
and while you
fight,
I would leave

no fuss

strange


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jellybeans
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1 posted 2001-07-27 04:37 PM


the commit we
made is
strangling us
and while you
fight,
I would leave

no fuss

strange

wow can you say it, and so compactly...this is incredible

Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2001-07-27 05:15 PM


yes compact and powerful...

nicely done

Corinne
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3 posted 2001-07-27 06:20 PM


So difficult
when life turns strange
and the one we knew
turns into a stranger...

Well said.

Corinne

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4 posted 2001-07-27 07:15 PM


Strange indeed, seems I recognize that apathy...well said!
mirror man
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5 posted 2001-07-27 10:58 PM


Yes, very well said.
shadow974
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6 posted 2001-07-27 11:06 PM



Very well written, relationships are difficult at best.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

Logan
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7 posted 2001-07-27 11:33 PM


Ahh, not so strange in some ways, for some do grow and some do stay...makes for a matter of where am I and where do I go now?..nice write...very gentle smile
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