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wpwpoet
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since 2001-07-25
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0 posted 2001-07-27 08:05 AM


I accidently came across the website and loved it. Thanks for being here! After reading some of the poems and comments, I would be honered to have some of the wonderfull writers here critque some of my work. Please be honest and constructive. This is not my best but a personal favorite. thanx wpwpoet

  Lucid Kiss

Arise through
soft lucid kiss
in sleep:
Awaken to a
spectral drift,
divine angelic
dream:
With my ghost,
Coalesce; thy
essential bliss:
In silence,
hearts endear
poetry:
Beyond loves
tranqiul cloud
serene:
Bestow, a tender
kiss, warm in
sleep:
Souls aspire to
dream, symbiotic
poetry...
CO.wpwpoet071701

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Sunshine
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Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-07-27 08:30 AM



Welcome to Passions, wpw...As you get familiar with your "new home" you will find several forums for different venues and yes, we even have a true to form Critical Analysis Forum!

You are going to enjoy yourself!  Please, check your e-mail for a special greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ




Sven
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since 1999-11-23
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2 posted 2001-07-27 01:20 PM


first of all, welcome!!  I hope that you will indeed like it here. . .

this is a wonderful poem, I found myself reading it again just because. . . I like the flow of it reading it aloud, but you might want to take a look at the length of your lines on the page, so as to not draw the reader astray. . .

emotionally, I loved it. . . a love the thought of a "lucid kiss". . . just like a "lucid dream"

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Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
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3 posted 2001-07-27 01:56 PM


Welcome to Passions. This is truely a place for sharing your soul. I hope you enjoy your stay.

Marilyn

cpalmer
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since 2001-06-26
Posts 977
Phoenix, Az
4 posted 2001-07-27 01:59 PM


Welcome to passions!
I love this poem...has such emotion!
Glad you could join us in the pages of blue!
Cindi

God is our inspiration; Words of the heart can be music to our ears
Cpalmer

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298

5 posted 2001-07-27 02:13 PM


gotta say I love this too, the only thing that throws me is the punctuation...but that's just me probably, I usually use minimum punctuation when a line break will serve just as well.....any way welcome, I enjoyed this a lot  
wpwpoet
Member
since 2001-07-25
Posts 99

6 posted 2001-07-27 07:05 PM


thank you all for the comments. I will remember them for my next rewrite.
I usually use punctuation rather than line breaks because I have found that often people...forget to...stop...But I will try.
thank you all once again and I love the intelligence here.
peace love and understanding...wpwpoet

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2001-07-28 03:22 PM


Welcome to Poetry Land  
nice to have you here with us.
your vocabulary and imagery in this is well done.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
jm

slow burn ...
light a candle for our love
So that we will always be
one on one in lovely love

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