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Miranda
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0 posted 2001-07-26 05:23 PM


Hot and Cold

Hot and cold...
that’s how you run,
like a faucet I should hit with a hammer.
Turning tepid until I want to climb out
of your heavy slickness ... then a soothing
fire to lure me back in ... to soak in
your embrace.

Hot and cold
causing my senses to reel
from the extremes ... not knowing if I
am coming or going...
The steam you exhale, clearing my head
of right and wrong, causing my
skin to prickle, as I willing slide
back into your depths...



© Copyright 2001 Miranda Falcon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-26 05:26 PM


I enjoyed this...
I like both the flow and the words..

nice work here...

The steam you exhale, clearing my head
of right and wrong, causing my
skin to prickle, as I willing slide
back into your depths...


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2 posted 2001-07-26 05:29 PM


"The steam you exhale, clearing my head
of right and wrong, causing my
skin to prickle, as I willing slide
back into your depths..."
wow...I like that very much.....

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3 posted 2001-07-26 05:31 PM



If this is how you are going to work through your writers' blocks....

you are going to be mighty welcome!

Miranda
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4 posted 2001-07-26 05:34 PM


LOL ... no writer's block currently. This is actually an old peice I just shared. Nope, I am simply slacking the day away. In the middle of an edit, I am trying to put off indefinately!
   Thankyou, everyone, so much for your comments.
           Miranda

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5 posted 2001-07-26 08:27 PM


Slack away old buddy, this was pretty good!

~ Give the heavens above more than just a passing glance ~And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance ~ I hope you dance. (Lee Ann Womack)

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