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It Goes Well With Blue

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wandering glider
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0 posted 07-26-2001 12:15 AM       View Profile for wandering glider   Email wandering glider   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wandering glider

It Goes Well With Blue


Powder blue and burnt sienna
(my favorite crayon color
when I was a kid)
this old pick-up mutters along
a little loose in the joints
like me now, and creaky.

But it wasn’t always like this
this old truck and I
and she.

We went to Seattle first
We were all young then
and the mountains
oh, they seemed so easy
And the Coast Highway?
Well, you know, you couldn’t
beat it in those days
even in a pick-up truck.

Then there was Tennessee
and those homey blue-green
hills we had never seen
and the smoke in the trees
we wondered about
Her lack of experience showed
and they knew we were just passing through
but still, we made friends
in Gatlinburg.

And Jones Beach on that
hot hot New York Saturday afternoon
the melted chocolate bar on the seat
and the sand in everything
I can still smell that surf
and almost taste the taffy
but the sand dollar, well
that’s gone.

She would nap on many a trip
curled up, my thigh her pillow
and we would drive all night
this old truck and I
for her

And the bench seat?
Well, it was big enough
for both of us when we needed it to be
though it wasn’t her favorite place
steamed up windows and all.

You know, there was hardly a place
this old truck wouldn’t go
or I wouldn’t take it
for her.

Yes, even there, finally
and we visit the spot often
muttering along
a little loose in the joints.

I don’t mind the rust now
it goes well with blue.
        
        

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JLR
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1 posted 07-26-2001 01:06 AM       View Profile for JLR   Email JLR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JLR

Poignant, well written...liked this very much!
Cpat Hair
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2 posted 07-26-2001 08:54 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

this....is wonderful....

I love stories told in poetic form..and you tell this one so well... i can relate to so much in it... very good!!!
wandering glider
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3 posted 07-26-2001 02:08 PM       View Profile for wandering glider   Email wandering glider   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wandering glider

JLR,
Thank you.  This was fun to "assemble".  Glad you liked so much.

Cpat Hair,
Thanks, but you are too kind.  I surprised myself with how well this turned out.
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4 posted 07-28-2001 09:07 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

what a wondeful story. . . it flowed very well, and I could see the truck in my mind as you told of it. . .

excellent. . .  

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Constance
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5 posted 07-28-2001 09:33 PM       View Profile for Constance   Email Constance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Constance

Loved the entire poem, but the final line clutched my heart.  I'll be reading this one many times, I know.

shadow974
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6 posted 07-28-2001 09:40 PM       View Profile for shadow974   Email shadow974   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shadow974

Excelent poem well written great descriptions.

Throw your heart out in front of you
And run out to catch it.

wandering glider
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7 posted 07-28-2001 10:31 PM       View Profile for wandering glider   Email wandering glider   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wandering glider

Sven,
Thanks for 'picking' this 'up'.
Actually, it all started with a meeting glimpse of such a truck and its driver.

Constance,
The final line fell into place like the entire poem had been written for it.  Funny how that works.  Thanks for your comment.  Looking forward to reading your work.

Shadow 974,
Thanks for your comment.  "Great descriptions" as you put it, come from life.
      

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8 posted 06-08-2004 12:23 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

And as for finding this treasure tonight? Pure poetic delight!
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