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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2001-07-25 10:18 PM


Castle built on clouds of love
rising o'er the hidden walls
princess gazes far above
prays that he will heed her call.

Destiny, she calls to you
eyes aglow with unshed tears
Come and show it to be true
tell her she has naught to fear.

Looking down, he signals her
yes, she will be his someday
one more season passing by
then shall he arrive to stay.

Patience, maid,I shall be there
though the barricades are tall
At this time I can't say where
Look for me behind each wall.

Hearts of past thus shall unite
never truly out of sight.


© Copyright 2001 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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1 posted 2001-07-25 10:27 PM


Nicely written, enjoyed the read.
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2 posted 2001-07-26 02:15 AM


Flows...like fantasy.  Enjoyed!
Logan
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3 posted 2001-07-26 02:27 AM


Ahh, hearts of past..and some would say they aren't real..as was is..very gentle smile
MARK V SHELDON
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In a corporeal internship...
4 posted 2001-07-26 02:43 PM


Always barracades...  What ever became of the wide-open roads and rolling hills?

-MVS

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--Del Casher

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5 posted 2001-07-26 02:54 PM


Fabulously woven, catalinamoon, really enjoyed this "Princely promise"


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6 posted 2001-07-26 07:10 PM


Sandra,
     The ultimate fantasy. I'm right there with you. You write so beautifully. If only the words could be our ticket to paradise, you would already be there.....
          Love, Elise

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Somewhere... out there...
7 posted 2001-07-31 09:05 PM



catalinamoon-
   Wonderfully woven piece..enjoyed reading this.
  
   hugs,
   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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8 posted 2001-07-31 11:38 PM


Well considering I live in "fantasy land" 14/7 you have to know I adored this one!  

~To see real beauty you must look with your heart~
           ~* Mysteria *~

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9 posted 2001-07-31 11:43 PM


CatalinaMoon~
The cadence in this piece is lovely~
A pleasurable read-aloud piece~

'Destiny, she calls to you
eyes aglow with unshed tears
Come and show it to be true
tell her she has naught to fear.'


Enchanting~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                 noles1@totcon.com              

Sunnyone
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10 posted 2001-08-01 08:48 PM


never truly out of sight......
yes, it's only out of sight if we let ourselves believe that it is......
think of all that we miss by talking ourselves out of believing!
Thank you for this one today, sis!!!!

The road goes on forever, and the stories never end...
  
    


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Deep in the heart
11 posted 2001-08-01 09:58 PM


Beautiful fairytale ... BTTT

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MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
12 posted 2001-08-01 11:08 PM




Castle built on clouds of love
rising o'er the hidden walls
princess gazes far above
prays that he will heed her call.

Destiny, she calls to you
eyes aglow with unshed tears
Come and show it to be true
tell her she has naught to fear.

======================

WOw.....Sandra....
What a lovely dream on the clouds.....
and you have penned it with such beautiful flow and tone.......Lovely

Thank you
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