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Mike
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0 posted 2001-07-24 10:10 PM



Jagged peaks thrust to the sky,
Tearing holes in heavens high,
Allow the sun, its light to pour,
Down mountains’ sides, to valley floor.

From snowcapped peaks of pure white grace,
Mountain brook in headlong race,
Against the sun’s cascading flow.
To verdant valley, far below,

From virgin snow, to tranquil lake,
Whil’st in between, wild path doth take,
Sun and gurgling mountain brook,
Freefalling down from heaven’s nook.

Unbroken sheen, clear crystal glass,
Reflecting peaks of mountains’ pass,
Sun and brook, meet at lake’s shore,
Having raced from God’s front door.

Sun and brook, their race a tie,
Mirroring splendor of the sky,
In their joinder, time stands still,
Gazing on God’s windowsill.

© Copyright 2001 Mike - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2001-07-24 10:23 PM


Mike, my friend...your view is spectacular!!
Dulcinea
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2 posted 2001-07-24 10:24 PM


Ahhhhhh...refreshing...makes me want to take my shoes off and dip my toes in that brook, just admiring the display on God's windowsill...beautiful images Mike. *S*
JLR
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3 posted 2001-07-24 11:48 PM


What a visual...felt like a mini vacation.  Thanks, I needed that!
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4 posted 2001-07-25 12:49 PM


Mike~
Imagery at it's finest.

Especially enjoyed -

'Jagged peaks thrust to the sky,
Tearing holes in heavens high,
Allow the sun, its light to pour,
Down mountains’ sides, to valley floor.'


So lovely~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Sunshine
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5 posted 2001-07-25 08:45 AM



I sincerely needed this walk....thank you for this....

cpalmer
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6 posted 2001-07-25 12:34 PM


Mike
Thank you for putting such a beautiful image in my head...I feel like I just took a nature walk...feeling refreshed!  Thanks  
Cindi

Marilyn
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7 posted 2001-07-25 02:29 PM


Again you prove to me why I am a great admirer of you work. Thankyou kind sir.  

Marilyn

Honeybee
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8 posted 2001-07-25 02:33 PM



What a beautiful image-packed journey you took me on  
Your writing is so wonderful!

Melissa~

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9 posted 2001-07-25 04:21 PM


Mike~ Thank you...for the reminder of what
beautiful poetry is all about...this is an
awesome write my friend~

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
10 posted 2001-07-25 06:56 PM


Such wonderful imagery mixed with perfection in cadence and meter.  This was definitely a pleasure to read and I am adding to my library so as to not only read again and again but also to learn from.  
Denise
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11 posted 2001-07-25 08:05 PM


Yes, spectacular indeed!! This is very beautiful, Mike!
vlraynes
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12 posted 2001-07-25 10:30 PM



Mike-
   What a lovely masterpiece you've painted here..
   Absolutely beautiful..

   hugs,
   ~vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his
heart, you have not truely met the poet."
-vlraynes



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